Thinking of you
Is like reading a poem without words.
Feeling you around
Means dancing in the shower
without drops of water.
Loving you with all my heart
Means dreaming without closing my eyes.
Missing you in lonely hour
Means being lost in the vast azure.
Remaining far from you
Means being lonely in the crowd.
Being just beside you
Means to see sunlight in the cloud.
Living life without you
Means living thousands of years without life.
Living with you makes
Thousands of years even short for a lifetime.
And mostly breathing and living in this world
Simply means loving you and loving only you.
Author notes
Written September 18th, 2006
A contest entry
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450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 171 entries
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Very beautiful... Your poems always awaken the feeling of love for my husband which I have hidden in my heart as he is away... Now I miss him more...
Anyways it is beautifully wriiten,seems to speak straight out of the heart...
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Thanks a lot for your heartfelt comment my dear. You know what it is a great success for a poet if someone really feels her poem from within. I feel honored to know that my poem do awaken love and memories of your husband within you. Keep missing him and keep reading my pieces.
lol
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Love the last 2 lines, all the comparisons were really sweet, though I did feel that 'Living life without you
Means living thousands of years without life.
Living with you makes
Thousands of years even short for a lifetime.' this was a bit repetitive in the way it repeats thousands of years, I dunno if that was intentional, it didn't flow quite right to me, apart from that though, lovely poem,keep it up
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Do you know how Einstein described theory of relativity.When you are with your sweet heart 'Days appear like seconds and seconds appear like years when you are not around sweet heart' You described relativity of love, like relativity in Physics which is all about time and space..a good poem to read and enjoy dear sister
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What beautiful metaphorical analogies you use here to express how the love you feel for this person is! That this person is all of these things to you... the words of a poem, the water that you cleanse yourself with, the dreams that you have "without closing your eyes", etc. They are all exquisite representations of how much this love sustains and nurtures you.
I especially loved what you expressed toward the end of your poem, what you say about time. I can relate to that whole-heartedly!
"Living life without you
Means living thousands of years without life.
Living with you makes
Thousands of years even short for a lifetime."
Very poetic and true!
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