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Aleatory

 
Adagio blood thrums lightly
Through me in a minuet of melody.
Legato breath flows with swelling
Expression to sweep up the libretto.

Music is not just my passion,
My life, it is me, as alive
In my soul as fantasia's waltz
That spirals into my overture.

The serenade of thrilling notes
Touch and caress parts of me
That no lover has known, loving
Refrains of melancholy and delight.

Thoughts dance through my mind
In a vibrant masque, intricate
Threads of counterpoint that entwine
And fight for dominance and harmony.

For me, maestro time does not tick
Or fly, but glides a regal pavane
Of modal tones and chromatic steps
That build to a final, perfect cadence.
 

Author notes

I've picked the option to write about what makes me tick. I'm really not very good at this sort of poem, I'm not very good at writing about myself...perhaps because I'm a somewhat private person, perhaps because I'm not sure what actually does make me tick yet. Either way....I decided to focus it on my passion, music. I hope this works as a piece.
Written September 18th, 2006

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  • Carus
    September 23, 2006
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    The serenade of thrilling notes
    Touch and caress parts of me
    That no lover has known, loving
    Refrains of melancholy and delight.

    Those words made me sing with joy, and not to mention, understand you better. It just...it is so beautiful, so complex and yet at the same time so delightfully simple. I loved every stanza, every line, every word, and this poem deserves to win more than anything else!

    -Carus-


  • jacks insanity
    September 21, 2006
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    its written well

    well, at least you can write


  • Sgt B
    September 19, 2006
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    Wow there is not much else to say. I play the drums & as a child I saw Buddy Rich play. I feel the same right now. all in awe.


  • mjseattle silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    Wonderful

    Like everyone before me said, it flowed and flowed and flowed like a musical river. Also, there is something about the rhythm that makes this, and your other poems, tick along like the second hand of a Rolex watch. Please keep up this quality of writing.
    Edited on Sep 18, 10:23 p.m. because 'spelling'.

  • Chocolate Poetry
    September 18, 2006
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    Oh my gosh! Absolutley brilliant! I can FEEL the passion you have for music and GOD do I share it! Wonderful job! It's great to relate to such a passionate poem. It makes it even more amazing. This has to be added to my favorites. The words you chose were perfect.


  • Menecairiel
    September 18, 2006
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    BRILLIANT!

    This is a perfect poem, in every sense of the word perfect. It flows so beautifully, like music, and it expresses all the things I know about you so wonderfully. It really is like music, as beautiful and moving...perfect. Just perfect Best luck in the contest!

    Menecairiel


  • Teddibly Abnormal
    September 18, 2006
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    wow.. now THAT is how you discribe music.
    wonderfully done
    Edited on Sep 18, 11:38 p.m. because ''.


  • Emmjay
    September 18, 2006
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    Very Good!

    Yes, a very powerfully beautiful piece. Though I have no formal theoretical music knowledge, I got the picture!
    To be honest, some of the music terms threw me a little, but the whole piece just flowed beautifully. It was soft, definitely melancholy and very colourful.
    Best wishes in the contest
    Sincerely -Emmjay


  • BrokenFiend
    September 18, 2006
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    Such a beautiful, beautiful poem, and so...you. It really is how I see you, and music is what drives you. Words, how they sound, rather than how you see them, the simple perfection of an imperfect sonata...all the things. So beautiful, and the wording here is truly extraordinary...bravo! One of your best poems yet!

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