Sleep tight tonight, my love,
let the winds sing you to sleep;
let your little black heart carry you
away to angry dreams.
Close your eyes and rest, sweetheart,
forget the trials of the day;
I know it’s because you love me so
that you’ve caused me so much pain.
I’ll watch over you, my dearest
as slumber enters in,
and once sweet sleep brings its respite,
I’ll ponder all your sins.
While you sleep tonight, my darling,
I’ll be watching well,
for the demons I’ve arranged to come
to guide you back to Hell.
Author notes
I know that this is short, but it is definately not sweet! And this is not a lost love story - it's a bad decision story! This is my morbid lullaby for my ex-husband. I married very young and was beaten nearly every day for four years as a reward for my innocence. I am not in the habit of feeling sorry for myself; instead I finally broke and beat the crap out of him - then I ran like hell. This poem is my goodbye to him, it's where my thoughts roam when I dream of revenge; it's my catharsis. Oh, and just for those of you have or will tell me that violence is not the answer: this is fiction, that's all.
A contest entry
- Just Once In My Life- I Wanna Loose Control-(From The Open Door album-Evanescence) by Bruised.Roses.
300 points, ended September 25, 2006, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can you write Dark poetry? by juliex-exotic shine.
475 points, ended April 28, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Darkest of the Dark [a prewrite contest] by DeadlyPoetic88.
695 points, ended February 23, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark, Despair, Doom by MaddCuppyCake.
425 points, ended February 27, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let the Darkness Come by MichaelLeeSmyth.
700 points, ended April 7, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I would disagree with those who say violence is not the answer. With the life I have partaken of, sometimes violence ends up being the only answer. Congrats on standing up for yourself. My daughter lived with a beater for a while, it took him putting her in the hospital before she understood it would never end.
Taking the reason for the poem out of it does nothing to weaken it. Not quite what I was looking for but still one excellent write. The final stanza is pure delight.
good luck in the contest
Peace
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your ex husband surely deserves this lullaby.
it was well written. the last two lines ended the poem well and made the most impact on me. well penned.
thank you for entering my contest
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I was just reading over my AP messages because sometimes I don't get them all, and I saw this bronze but I didn't see a reply. If I replied to you personally, please feel free to ignore me. If I didn't reply, how rude & I am so sorry! Thank you so much for the bronze.
Thank you & Blessed Be,
Rae
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Awesome...
Deep, dark, honest & heartfelt...
Intense, manic yet eerily calm in its delivery...
Great suspense & drama throughout...
Released the breath I didn't realise I was holding as I finished reading...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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This is just so wonderful! I felt this from the very first word! The authors notes are so open and honest...you are a strong soul and a survivor...a shining example to many!
Blessed be~
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re: Bercuse Macabre
I am so sorry for this late reply; my AP IM doesn't seem to be working, hhhmmm. So, it's taken me a few days to realize that I have a lot of people to thank. So thank you. I like this one, too. Whenever I feel I can't trust a man, I recite this to myself and Boom! Crises over. It just gets all those feelings out instantly. Plus, I'll always have the memory of him lying on the kitchen floor gasping for air as I ran out the front door with my car keys, tee-hee.
I need to stop by soon & spy on your new contributions!
Blessed Be,
***Rae***
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I love dark poetry
in a rhyming, sing-song format... it's like a delicious, naughty, violent little nursery rhyme that I'd never share with my child... I LOVE IT!
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I'm touched!
I'm touched! Coming from you, I cherish this compliment! Your talent amazes me, so I am so, so pleased that you liked this! No, I would not suggest singing this lullaby to a child!
I've a friend in a band who's trying to recreate this as a goth-song; should be interesting to see what develops! Thanks again for your kind words.
***Rae***
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This is deliciously dark for your ex! Wonderfully written. I am sure he inspires a lot of dark thoughts. The lullaby is wonderful. Good luck in the contest.
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re: "Bercuse Macabre"
Thank-you for your kind words. Yes, he does indeed inspire dark thoughts! I recently learned that he just re-married, and to a girl as young as I was when we wed. I do not know her, but my heart is aching; I do not believe that leopards change their spots. Hopefully she inspires him to be a better man; I'll be praying that she stays safe.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!
Blessed Be,
***Rae***
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This poem is incredible, and very powerful. The imagery and flow of it work so well. I couldn't stop reading it over and over again! Thank you for entering, and good luck!
xx Julie
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re: "Bercuse Macabre"
Thanks so much! I'm pleased you like it so well! Yes, I must admit, on days when I am reliving a particularly nasty beating, I tend to find myself humming this little lullaby while smiling to myself. I guess I have a little, tiny part of me that can be quite vindictive! Thanks for such a great idea for a contest!
Blessed Be,
***Rae***
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What a lovely poem we are writing in collaboration with Him who is the Master Writer. I think we are written exactly like this into HIS poem. You said it so beautifully: there is light even in times of darkness
Myra -
This is so . . . strange. God does indeed work in mysterious ways. This poem is a bit, ah, dark. But it was written for a contest and I'm not usually this dark. That being said, I do feel as if, with all that's going on in my life lately, there is a "darkness" present that is overshadowing things that I am trying to accomplish. Your words reinforce my feeling that I must focus on the positive and pull against dark callings. Your comments are taken to heart and your timing is proof that there is light even in times of darkness.
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Beloved One, I recognize your talent, for it is given to you by Light and NOT by darkness. Darkness cannot create anything positive. It may USE your talents but NOT create your brilliance. I simply KNOW you are gifted.
Thank you for stressing timing, for that is exactly the way God works. He sent me here in order to tell what you are ready to hear.
I love you and pray for you.
Myra -
Thank you for your comments on Bercuse Macabre. Your words are greatly appreciated. And I will try to write you a beautiful poem of life and love. An interesting challenge, and interesting timing, too. I have a feeling that -with what I'm going thru lately- that God (or the greater power) is giving me the same challenge. I will be thinking about this a lot in the next few days and hopefully something inspiring will emerge. Thanks you so much; your words meant a lot.
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What a superb last verse really, really first class.This alone should win any comp.
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Paradox of Love
You have written this with masterful and atmospheric shadows. Now write me a poem of life and love
Please?
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Your Request Honored
I fought so hard to find a place to write from of "life and love," and, once again, I am led to believe the Divine One crossed our paths because I came up with something that, while a bit sophmoric, I have been saying to myself everyday and has helped bring the Positive back to my life. And all because you suggested it . . .
I'm just posting it tonight. I'm not soliciting for comments, just thanking you from the bottom of my heart for helping me find that beter place.
Blessed Be,
Rachele
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Hey this was an amazing poem, I loved your rendition of the morbid lullaby, and I thank you for entering
this was my favorite part:
Sleep tight tonight, my love,
let the winds sing you to sleep;
let your little black heart carry you
away to angry dreams.
Close your eyes and rest, sweetheart,
forget the trials of the day;
I know it’s because you love me so
that you’ve caused me so much pain.
I’ll watch over you, my dearest
as slumber enters in,
and once sweet sleep brings its respite,
I’ll ponder all your sins.
It just brought so much pain and power to the piece!!!!! amazing.....great job! thank you and good luck.
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