Slow but persistent
soft fingers were rolling
on the other side, coming up with
a strange demand to enter.
Barefoot I walked to see
who was there interrupting mine
and my cat's privacy.
Glossy crystal glass and autumn face
covered with colors and touched with a magic
circles from the street lights
and with one lonesome lean birch leaf.
That was a cold, unsafe place to rest.
I wondered if this was one from the summer crown
where I used to sit in the shade.
I slowly took it like a sleepy baby
and put it on my palm cradle.
Cold night drops over my face
and silent wind
entered into my room
like a thief's.
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Written September 18th, 2006
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And you have a lovely heart.
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Thanks Lyndon. This is not probably the best one but it was written from my heart.
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Sonja, you have written a fine lyrical free verse poem in adulation to Fall. It is a straightforward but "pretty" poem.
It is a 'hovering' poem between memories of Summer; color of autumn and signs of cold weather to come. Images and figurative language bring poetry to the verse, well.
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Thank you R S Adams Jr for so nice comment. I am glad that you enjoed my verses.
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magic mystery
A wonderful, mysterious poem you have written. I like the image of the cat and the cosiness of your home. This poem makes me feel comfortable.
Only one, lonely leaf left from the crown of summer glory, to take comfort in your palm, and to find succour in your warmth. A pleasant. wholesome, peaceful, picture. Well done. -
Thank you dear Rowan for your time to read my poetry, for your precious comment and for applause.
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What a wonderful ode to fall. Alive with color and that feeling of
nostalgia that autumn seems to weave upon us. Beautiful penning.
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Thank you MA for your time to read my poetry. That means a lot to me.
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wonderful
this gave me the chills,and that is a compliment! what a wonderful, restless poem! -
Thanks cocoacure for comment and applause. I am glad you like it. This picture I found to fits with my verses and cat on the window looks like mine too.
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You brought me right up close to your window. The imagery was crisp and warm just like the picture. Great work!
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Thanks Udit for your kindness to comment and for your help. I appreciate it very much. Also, with your coment you make me to
~Sonja~
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What amazing imagery!!! You've really described it all happening here.
Brilliant!
Just a couple of grammatical errors I thought I'd point out.
"where I'v used to sit in the shade."
It could be where I used to.....
then the last line- like a thiefs
you forgot the apostrophe- thief's
But the poem in itself is simply a masterpiece. I applaud! Well done.
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Thank you Linda.
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Sonja, this is reallyyyy a good post, it was well worded to keep the interest in the ending..over all good poem.. thank you for sharing and good luck..MM
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Welcome back James. I am glad to meet you again. Thanks for your comment and kind help.
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Thanks to my dear La, I'v got a first applause for this poem.
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Very good
This is a great piece Sonja - final word is not 'thieves' but thiefs - I really like this, has great atmosphere.
James
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Thank you rooibos for your time to read and comment my poetry, I knew that I made a mistake but to me it was invisible.
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Great poem, great imagery, just one little thing that caught my eye as I read through it. I think that my cat is supposed to be my cat's...
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