Poor, little
whore.
Why do you let them use you?
Have you not a mind of your own?
They'll never be there for you.
They'll never care.
They'll giggle, steal from, and mock you
Behind your back.
Taking all that you once cherished,
and held close to you,
They'll leave you with nothing
but broken trust and heartache.
They'll make you take all of the blame,
and force you to do as they say.
You'll risk everything for them,
Because you're dying for acceptance.
Stripped of all originality,
Conforming to all of their standards.
You'll become just like them.
Oh, why can't you see?
That you're nothing but their lackey?
Poor, little
whore.
Author notes
I wrote this in studyhall. I don't like it very much, though.
Written September 18th, 2006
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Damn; this was pretty amazing. Absolutely true for all those little cliques in high school-- and true even when moving forth from all that bullshit. hahah, a non-stop depressing reality. lol
I used to be much like the poor little whore you speak of in your poem. Pfff, I couldn't tell up from down to be honest but I can sit back and now realize this. Your poem definitely did justice to that universal situation.
Great write!
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Very Good
I like it, except for the last line. I heard some one talk about "they" the other day, BAsicly they said. Who are they, And who the hell cares what they think. We try and satisfy so many people in our life. One thing I know, If I am happy with me then it doesn't matter what "they" think. You have the right Idea here, Work on the last line and I think you may have a master piece. -
Hehe.
Thank you. I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it. And your feedback is very much appreciated.
I use the word "lackey" all the time too!! Yay! I would love to read some of your poems, as well, when I come back online tomorrow.
Thanks again!!
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Killer write!
Oh my Gosh! You are a powerful writer! that is the first time I have read the word lackey in a poem! I used that word myself in a poem once and I have never seen it since! I love your expression and your thought in your poem! your sarcasm really plays well and it makes one really stop and think! Great job! -
^what she said
and hi sissyyy
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Thank you. I know I'm not a whore. It wasn't really about me. Just a generalization about society, and the people in my school.
I'm the same way. I'm always so anxious to get out of school. When I get out, AP is always the first thing that I do. Sometimes I don't even take my shoes or anything off yet. Hehe.
Thanks.
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this isnt you ...
you're not a whore
you're the best person in my life!
dont know where id be without you
its almost as i suffocate to be around my friends
i wait .. anxiously till three
when u finish school .. so i can talk to you
ur not a whore .. and never will be one
amazing write
its not as bad as it seems
love u ♥
~NeVeR~
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This is a really great write. The state of society is right here. Mtv and glamour magazines feeding on those the lambs that need to be led around and cant think for themselves. Sorry about my little rant there. Your image is nothing if you can't paint it yourself. Keep writing. I look forward to reading all of them.
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pretty good. no homework cause the pics took the entire first pd, but i have to pick a topic for a college essay/do a study guide on "The Stranger" by Alfred Camus- some french thing translated to english by thursday... meh. school annoys me!!! but i have crossroads- biblestudy/kids program/dinner/etc tomorrow and every tuesday nite wootage, 3 hours out of my house- thank freaking god. *mwah* <3 ya sissyy
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Thanks.
My day was alright. Thanks for asking. How was yours? Good, I hope. -
i <3 my little sissy tis good and my sis rockssss. how was ur day dear?
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lol. thank you, love.
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You don't suck at comments, love. Don't worry about it.
Who is this bunny that you speak of? Let's feed it carrots.
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PS. I forgot to applaud
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Poor little bunny
I like this poem It reminds me of Myspace. Damn conformists > *Shakes fist*
.. Sorry that I suck at leaving comments
Keep writing
I love yooou<3
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