Tempestuous rage of all encompassing
Emotion. A phase of hate, primordial notion.
Marked by the self inflicted pain, to
Please the soul, time and again. Clear
Expression of the storm's slow brewing of
Self sacrifice, words silently spewing. Don't
Tread the path at the soul's edge, for
Soon to fall deep over the ledge. Small glints of
Hope, a laugh in the face. Tangled and tripping,
Each step that I take. Never to find
Access of what lies inside, cut short of truth,
Reasons denied. Within my heart, the rage roils on,
This tempest's heart is surely gone.
Author notes
Well this isn't exactly what I planned to write for your contest, but that name jumped out ot ma like 100 times since last night, and this is where it went. I'll try for something a little better.
Written September 18th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- My points are burning a hole in my pocket!!! by WarrioroftheHeart.
350 points, ended September 27, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you for your much appreciated comment.
Storm -
this piece is brilliant.
well penned
congrats for winning the gold
you deserve it
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Thank you sweetheart. I feel like you are writing a Dear Abby column to me today. It was a wierd day for writing, as if you can't tell. And yes, I'm a fighter, you know that. Don't worry, I won't lose sight of the whole picture. Besides I got friends like you to kick my butt when I do, lol.
Thank you love
Storm -
To let one's heart be taken in such a manner is not what you are, sweetheart. You are and have always been a fighter. The tempest's heart is never truly gone, but sometimes it does need to regroup. Never lose sight of the fight. For it may find you when you least expect it. As well as love. Love you babe.
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Thank you Vickie, I appreciate you so much. If you only knew.
Autumn -
The Storm's heart will never be gone sweety, just hidden for a moment or two. You have too much heart for it to ever be completely knocked down. Pick yourself back up and smile, you are loved hon.
My love to you
Vickie -
You have penned a remarkable acrostic here. The roiling of the storm could be felt along with the rage in the heart. The feel is flowing and twisting so like the emotions that are inside and also on the level of a natural tempest. Well done, again another name entry from me. lol
Mouser [guess I wont be able to use them now
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Thank you John, I appreciate your kind words.
Storm -
Thank you Sandy. Just blowing off some steam. Guess it's better in writing than to be a storm in Orlando...like they don't have enough of them, lol.
Storm -
great
This as said above is so well written and with such a great display of emotions, the flow and rhythm are fantastic, you have done a great job here, it should be a contest winner, blessings John -
Storm,
I think this is written so well! No matter the route your muse takes you, it always comes forth as awesome! The best of luck to you in the contest! -
Thanks hun. As I said to someone else, I can see where my writing is going today. But at least I know it comes from heart and soul. Appreciate the comment.
Storm -
I like this, its very angry, yet well structured and with a good rhythm.
Thanks for entering Storm, I look forward to another entry from you, especially if its going to be better.
If thats possible
Adrian
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