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Massage~

Missing image
-the massage-


refreshing
as lavoris peppermint

-therapeutic-
as Australian tea oil

palms of aloe vera

with Swiss secrets~

-gently-

surfacing s l o w l y

tracing the spine

swirls~ ~ ~

upon -silken- flesh

-warmth-

with olive sensations~

leaving thoughts -tranquil-

sowing seeds
of lasting memories

-unconditionally-

stimulating heartbeats

through piano fingertips

from head to toe

with a hint of baby fresh

and a strong dose of

-musical- love

leaving the mind, body, and soul


in ~ecstasy~

 
-poeticweaver

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Thanks for reading, hope your time was relaxing~ -Tim xo
Written September 18th, 2006

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  • Amera gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    I love this! It's penned like it should be a fast read but I found myself reading it slowly simply to enjoy the beautiful image. I'm impressed, you got right into my mind.

    Love,
    Amera ♥

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 15, 2007

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    Magnificent

    Such a soothingly sensual vibe with this one.  The format that you've used allows the words to be absorbed and really stimulates the mind. Again, a write that teases and delights the senses, in all the right ways. Some of the expressions you've used are awe-inspiring. 'Swiss secrets', 'sowing seeds of lasting memories', well, from start to finish to be honest but, those are the lines that linger. A splendid poem, Timothy. Such a pleasurable read. Thank you, so much for sharing this beauty with me. Your poetry speaks to me.

    Peaceful blessings,
    Ashley


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 22, 2007

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    Relaxing Indeed

    Such a wonderful treat.
    This was heavenly to read..
    Such a beautiful portrait you have painted

    Thank you for sharing

    Peace

    ~M~

  • Apoichomai
    October 22, 2006
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    i love this. i don't know what else i can say except that it was just amazing, as are your other poems. i love the layout and set of this poem < 33 Very original. i am with Queenie on this one. Great write < 33

  • XTiffanyMarieX
    October 17, 2006
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    I love this... I just don't really know what to say.

    <33 Tiffany


  • queenie
    September 29, 2006
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    i feel like i've had a full body massage as each word from this tranquil piece caressed my poetic fibers.this is simply superb .you relaxed my mind and my body with this.if your hands massage the body the way your words massage the soul,you are missing your calling.i'm just glad you are such a fantastic poet.


  • luckynsincere
    September 25, 2006
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    as always I am left with my heart on the floor This is amazing!! darn.... now I want some peppermint...lol. thanks for just being you. I loved this write. Brought me a long awaited sighhhhhh!
    Mel


  • September 24, 2006
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    I love this sensual piece!


  • slightlyFey
    September 24, 2006
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    such beautiful and sensual words...great flow and I as well like the layout of the words, the images used makes the fragrances and sensations seem almost real, great work, take care
    Michelle Fey

  • saffron love child
    September 23, 2006
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    excelent

    nice one


  • lunarmist 53
    September 23, 2006
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    Subtly massages the mind.

    Alovera and native pepper,ground to a fineness of etherial spray,smeared gently behind the knees and massaged outwardly for several minutes.....till reaching lower buttock.

    MMM....your work has set me thinking....grabs pestal and heads for the hills in search of Native peppers.

    Very evokative.

    Enjoyed.

    Alan.

  • pozo
    September 23, 2006
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    Great poem which I liked a lot, very interesting layout here. I like the use of similes here, especially at the start of this. Good use of imagery here. This was a great hopeful poem which I liked a lot. Keep writing, this was a really descriptive poem which showed a massage really well
    All the best
    Pozo


  • myrataal silver member
    September 22, 2006
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    Tactile

    Now you have given me the first massage I ever had.

    Hmmmmmmmm.

    Aromatic poetry.



    Myra


  • Stardust-luvr
    September 21, 2006
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    sensual

    mm mydearest friend you have penned an incredible write with such a sensual sensory experience of a massage. with things going on lately i could use a wonderful massage right now --any recommendations or volunteers lol lol xxxxxxxxxxxxxx Imiss you!!


  • wings of an angel
    September 21, 2006
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    very nice write that you had penned here


  • -Ang-
    September 21, 2006
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    WOW, the imagery was fantastic, the sensuality and love and a whole lot more that i cannot describe is purfectly balanced in this piece (i hope that makes sense).



    ang


  • Emmjay
    September 20, 2006
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    Very Good

    Very good write poeticweaver . Wonderfully vivid and sensual!
    The image before also tends to give the piece a slightly erotic feel to it.
    Well done!
    Best wishes -Emmjay


  • freespirit51
    September 20, 2006
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    Great write. Romance is the key to love making. I think there should be more of it.


  • cmarie876
    September 20, 2006
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    very very nice poem I liked it alot

  • DarkOne24
    September 20, 2006
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    "Piano fingertips" is the greatest line I have read for a long while. I like the broken line style and the perfect way you have placed iamges into my mind encompassing all that a massage can be, thank you.

  • Rudolf
    September 20, 2006
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    well written

    Very well written,the images you created come very close to the real thing,and that's pleasurable read.rudolf


  • puzzledone121
    September 20, 2006
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    very sensual write, poetic weaver..hmmm, is that why it often ends up in making love? lol


  • Tam
    September 20, 2006
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    Great description of a massage!
    Very welll done indeed.
    I feel more relaxed even as we speak. Thank you.
    Blessings! Tammy


  • JustFallingApart
    September 20, 2006
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    nice poem!I realy liked the picture too.i've seen it in one of my books.....anyway,that was random,but i realy liked the poem keep writing.


  • onesongglorygurl
    September 20, 2006
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    It's very expressive. Awesome job on the details and descriptions. it's a great write!


  • Night Terrors
    September 20, 2006
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    wow a massage sounds so great!!!!!!! well a very cool poem !

  • Kamfer
    September 20, 2006
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    I liked the detail. But at the same time i hate you cuz i want a massage now... haha.
    comment one of my poems, thanks.


  • BathedInBlood
    September 20, 2006
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    Damn! That was really nice. I liked that alot. That was something else. I can't even pick a favourite line, cause they were all that damn good. Keep that up. Your writing flows with passion, you'd do good to never lose that.

  • Mother Angst
    September 20, 2006
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    lovely

    reading poetry is a massage for the mind, dont u think?
    im not a touchy-feely sort of person, but this poem was lovely.


  • moonmagick
    September 20, 2006
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    Sign me up! Great write! loved the flow.

  • myyounglady
    September 20, 2006
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    awesome

    great write. you had tingles going up and down my back, even a few other places.


  • My Solitude
    September 20, 2006
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    Wondrfully woven. It left a smile on my face. Great toning... The rhythm is amazing. Great job.


  • Sabrinasgarden
    September 20, 2006
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    The way in which you have used the various words and names of oils simultaneously creates an exceptionally descriptive, sensual yet slightly surreal experience for the reader. Now if only someone would rub me...LOL.


  • Develon
    September 20, 2006
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    A very elegant piece. I loved the descriptive wordplay: "palms of aloe vera...piano fingertips." Really gets the reader thinking about the atmosphere of the massage exchange. great work.

    -Develon

  • Francis Vincent
    September 20, 2006
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    enchanting

    very enchanting
    a sense of serenity
    for mind and body


  • Whispering Mirage
    September 20, 2006
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    Excellent!

    Beautiful! Very, very well done, I feel refreshed! Gorgeous, I love all the scents, swirling in the air! Love to you and yours my sweet dear friend! Mirage

  • Son of Jim
    September 20, 2006
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    Tim
    liked the product type references, really clings your reader to what you are saying and building in your metaphor. good poem.


  • Sunkissedrose
    September 19, 2006
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    Ok, where do I sign up for such a massage? This was really sensual and just amazing. I am glad that you dug deep inside of you and brought this to the surface. Excellent write....is there going to be a sequel?


    Love ya
    ~carrie

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    What a different piece than I am used to from you.

    I love it!


  • ScotsLass
    September 19, 2006
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    Beautiful. The construction of this was perfect, your word play exquisite and your imagery unique. It made me feel like I was floating...


  • magicalprincess
    September 19, 2006
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    AWESOME MASSAGE!

    I just had to applaud that one, it was after all a great comment, and knowing him, he loved it! Tim, this is an awesome piece, thanks for sharing your magic with us here once again my friend, say hi to lil Timmy too! Who is not so little anymore.

    Kayla~


  • sarajaneUK
    September 19, 2006
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    Don't you just love piano fingertips? Excellent piece to linger in. sj


  • HisBreathlessDream
    September 18, 2006
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    my god, *deep breath* i am SO in awe of you .... Will you marry me!?!?


  • OwlMagic
    September 18, 2006
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    Yes, i certainly am relaxed now, I could feel those piano fingers quite well


  • soulfultia gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    Relaxing

    Well this was a very.... pleasurable and sensual read.... makes me want to get a massage myself!! Good lead into visual with the display of your words and aren't you just on a creative streak! Good flow and had me almost relaxed just reading it! Good write, you get an applaud for making me feel relaxed!!
    ~Tia


  • September 18, 2006
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    A very sensual and relaxing poem, I love the whole look and structure of the poem. Very nice work, please check out some my poems I would love some feed back from you.

    Much Luv,
    S/Zero


  • Teddibly Abnormal
    September 18, 2006
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    loved this
    Edited on Sep 18, 11:39 p.m. because ''.


  • Ninth-Poet
    September 18, 2006
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    a fine piece

    Ah! I feel so refreshed and as fresh a rose! This is nicely penned with a gentle flow. I can sense the passion of the words enter my pores so vividly.

    What was the driving inspiration to your little masterpiece?

    -Keep the ink flowing!
    -Dave


  • ericv89
    September 18, 2006
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    thumbs up!

    very nice , any writing which makes you feel a certain way is a success. you have put feeling into this, and i have gotten a feelin out of it. you are amazing, keep writing, let it flow. any writer can create an image but few create and successfully convey a serious emotion-- you have a gift so continue to share =)


  • Renee Danielle
    September 18, 2006
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    Good imagery. Very sensual. Makes me want a massage...


  • PoetsAngel
    September 18, 2006
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    This is brilliant, so relaxing and sensual...Did someone turn the heating up?.....hang on while I open a window...suddenly very warm in here....

  • CorazonQuebrado6
    September 18, 2006
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    wow this was different and yes very relaxing... i liked it!! It was very descriptive so you can almost feel the massage.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 18, 2006
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    AMAZING! Seriously! Keep on writing! This was a sweet and incredible piece! It was so unique to what I usually read...that's why I like it so much! Keep it up! I hope to see more poems from you!


  • dutch2lips gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    ah pure mental massage, sweet!


  • Micah Young
    September 18, 2006
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    vivid

    HEY i was going to write that... excellent write.

  • Elle Ayche
    September 18, 2006
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    Beautiful!! Ahhhh...I feel the essence of your massage with each stroke of the pen that you render!


  • chastity30
    September 18, 2006
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    Sensual and relaxing , amazing imagry and fee

    Very sensual and relaxing read , it almost makes you feel as if you're there . You captured the moment and feeling extremely well . I love it ! Keep up the great writing hon .

    Lots of love ,
    Amber


  • Sacred Ground
    September 18, 2006
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    BRAVO

    I just had my very first braingasm!! Can we read each other again??


  • white stone
    September 18, 2006
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    Oh, Christ I could really use a good massage right now. Crisp and clean, very sensual, very indulging to the senses. Relaxed me just reading it, and really made me wish I had 60 or 70 extra bucks . mmm....peppermint. Thx.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    Tim, this is so wonderfully written.
    I love the imagery here.
    What I would give to feel this way right now! lol
    This was a very soothing and enjoyable read.
    Thanks for sharing this here!
    Keep up the wonderful work!


    Allen0826


  • fireymoondancer
    September 18, 2006
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    applaud this one

    WOW! a tremendous piece very well written I loved it all, keep doing your thing that way


  • AgeofAquarius
    September 18, 2006
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    W RITE ONN BRO!!

    Groove thang ...Groove thang!!! I can see the lights dim bro and hear the Barry white as I read this..

    You ALWAYS got the MOOOTH in smooth...

    As always very elegant and full of sensual bliss..!!!


  • ShaylaRenea
    September 18, 2006
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    sounds sensational.


  • PoeticTragedyx
    September 18, 2006
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    awesome

    very detailed and descriptive
    I love it


  • HoneyFire
    September 18, 2006
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    Nice poem
    Very very very well written.
    Love it.

    HoneyFire!


  • Norman Crabtree
    September 18, 2006
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    yeah what a great idea, this really works, you captured the feelings and tranquilty of a massage perfectly with great minimalist language and feeling. i really enjoyed it.

    the only criticism i have is. because of your formatting. does this work on paper? would you as a poet feel good about relying on those formatting techiques? if so then BRAVo and crack on!


  • LoveEssence
    September 18, 2006
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    Aww, Timmy. That sweet soul of yours gives cavities. Seriously. (Haha, so lame a comment, but I've been wanting to use it on someone, Lucky you!) I haven't been on in a while, but my love heard me sing your praises and saw this poem and told me, so then I had to come look and its awmazing as always. I love reading your stuff, you know. Hope life is just as awmazing as your writing. <3 Love you.

    Lauren


  • Nature Song silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    Interesing poem. Sensual, loving all in one without being erotic. The font was interesting choice as well. Well done poet friend! ~Sie


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    September 18, 2006
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    NEVER read anything like this before, really. It's like you're giving a brain a massage, showing it how relaxed and calm and brillent poetry can be. GREAT job!


  • Insightful Dodger
    September 18, 2006
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    Lexical rubdown

    It's almost a massage in itself to read. . . The floating, syncopated and VERY expressive rythyms, the almost perfect metaphors, the lack of fruitless complexity and subsequent abundance of appropriate simplicity. You've massaged my mind as it were, thanks. . . Same time next week?


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    Timothy...
    This was one of my favorites of yours...So beautiful and mesmerizing....You have such a lovely way of expressing yourself in words....
    Bravo, my sweet friend!
    Lynda


  • Fire N Ice
    September 18, 2006
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    I love this piece, very well writen


  • Fire N Ice
    September 18, 2006
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    I love this piece, very well writen


  • bludstaindsoliloquy
    September 18, 2006
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    You write with such beauty and grace . . . it's hard not to fall in love with the words. Absolutely relaxed, I'm off to take a nap! Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with all of us!

    Maggie


  • StillbornSonofMan
    September 18, 2006
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    Teh OMG Awesome?

    Homgshitgawd.

    That's awesome. Real beautiful o.o


    I love the presentation and font variation along with the beautiful linguistics.



  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    what a beautiful and passionate piece of poetry art, you have here.
    truly a wonderful written poem.
    a awesome job,
    i enjoyed completely.
    joyce

  • Ladybug1962
    September 18, 2006
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    Excellent!!!

    I loved the use of the use of scents with the imagery. Awesome job!


  • inspire2dream
    September 18, 2006
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    Romanticly tuned

    A very sensual piece.. I could feel and see the visual in this. I like it, not at first though then when i got into it more it captivated me. Your were coovering all the senses and descriptive "stimulating heartbeats through piano fingertips" I liked this line the most. I will remember this next time I am giving a massage.


  • mitimse
    September 18, 2006
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    I'm not sure if I can relax. this piece of lovelyness leaves a 'tantric' vision. Mr.jOe


  • masterblaster gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    Hi massage, I could do with that right know,my body is screaming in tiredness, you spoke of Australian tea oil, I gather you were talking of Melaluka or tea tree oil as it is normally called, it is quite incredible as is a natural antibiotic, anti fungus, antihestamien, plus many other things all from one plant, loved the write, hugs Di


  • paullallady silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    good

    oh this is so awesome, so wonderful. it flowed so easily, like liquid. and it is erotic in the best subtle way. I
    truly loved this. good job.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    from head to toe


    with a hint of baby fresh


    and a strong dose of


    -musical- love


    leaving the mind, body, and soul




    in ~ecstasy~

    Thank you Tim..truely my time was relaxing with so much beautiful words and the great immagery used here in passionate poetry here.. a great work indeed..and yes great picture above the poem..just lovely..


  • TaNya BaBy
    September 18, 2006
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    Lovely piece


  • Dragonsong silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    Very nicely written... a good progression and a sensual exploration of a beautiful act… I love the use of the various oils in the opening lines.. this allows one to explore even more of the senses… Well Done! ~Dini~

  • Poetic Fanatic
    September 18, 2006
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    Like Calgon Take Me Away!

    Wonderful Tim!
    Ab-So-Lute-Ly WonDerFull! Thank you for this immense pleasure.
    Your words are a sweet sensation to a sorrowful soul. (applause)

    Continue to do what you are doing for we be of many
    who need your consolation. God bless you brother.

    Tommy


  • Kari gold member
    September 18, 2006
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    awesome

    This was wonderful!!!! It was penned beyond perfection and very pure delight to read! Thanks so much for sharing it with us!
    Its not even up for a contest

    Kari


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    This was beautiful..Now, for myself, since I do massage and bodywork for a living, boy oh boy, would I be in trouble doing this..LOL This was so sensual and loving...Beautifully written with gentleness and a soft touch..The imagery was fantastic..Thanks for sharing...and yes, I do feel relaxed...lol
    Soulful Woman


  • backlog
    September 18, 2006
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    i could imagine this on one of those relaxation tapes where they tell you to close your eyes and feel yourself sink into the earth beneath you.

    great use of imagery, flow/rhythm/style and aesthetics.


  • twinzy001
    September 18, 2006
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    Timothy,
    Oolala I think I need a back or body massage This was excellant,sensual and tempting......very nice write

    Twinzy


  • Angels Delight
    September 18, 2006
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    Tim...

    It was just so relaxing and so sensual...I know if I see a featured poem of yours that it's going to be worth my while to read it...You are simply amazing...

    Thanks for sharing your masterpiece

    Much love
    Tessa


  • tomisb
    September 18, 2006
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    A dance of sensuality, but what massage could be anything less. Nice use of poetic conceits and lovely eddys of thought and sensation caught in each verse.

    Now I know the joy of a professional massage and how deeply relaxed and like a cat I feel. This sounds like a personal love massage by a lover and that can only be a well spring of joy.
    Love, Tom B.


  • starwing
    September 18, 2006
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    this was really cool Tim..a tad different then what you usually write..but thoroughly enjoyable....peace and harmony...Desi


  • September 18, 2006
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    Thank God ! I love direct poetry!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    This is sooo very soothing, relaxing, and tastefully sensual, my sweet love brother!
    Sigh....just thinking about a massage is relaxing!
    Loved this; thank you for sharing!


  • poeticpieces
    September 18, 2006
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    Excellent write daddio~
    Keep that imagery flowing, you're the best!

    -Timmy


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 18, 2006
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    Very well done

    a good write.


  • Iohagh
    September 18, 2006
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    Its a very pretty poem.


  • sustaind
    September 18, 2006
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    very relaxing!
    your are truly talented


  • blueangel4u
    September 18, 2006
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    -sighs- me likes this, awesome poetry, pen on!

    blueangel4u

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