Excuse me Darling,
I think you left
Your love on the
Pages of my heart.
The first page~
From hello,
A sweet feeling found.
The second page~
Third, fourth, and fifth too,
A hope found for me and you.
From there on
Each page I turn,
The words I find
Are filled with you.
When tomorrow arrives
The page I turn,
Let me find
Your true love
Written there.
Author notes
Written September 17th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Who or what do you love?...I am Paying It Forward by pearl-dragon.
525 points, ended September 9, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everybody Scream Your Heart Out: PW! by Wilted Rose Bush.
450 points, ended February 23, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A good take on the title of love.
I like how you equate a relationship
and life to the pages of the book, I
have done the same thing in a poem.
great job. good luck in the contest. -
Precious!!
Beautiful piece You have penned which tugs at the Heartstrings
Wonderful weaving of words~
that touches deep to the core of Spirit!
Love this!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Wow! Fantatic metaphor used and really shows your emotions and feelings! Great take on the contest and good luck!
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Aw, that was so sweet! It was unique as well, I've never read a love poem where it describes one's heart as a book. Very clever and poetic of you my dear. It's exactly what I wanted. Keep up this beautiful work.
From,
Cj
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Thank you for your contest entry. This is one of those times when I can't pick a favourite part because it is all so soft, romantic and beautiful.
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Tear Tear.
AWW! omg. I almost started crying. This is sooo cute! I love it. Good Luck in my contest. Wow.
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3 claps...9pts
Reading list reward from the Lionsloves Lair
~Lilac
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Beautiful imagery...
A gorgeous romantic write, so endearing it made me sigh
Wonderful flow and emotion filled...truly lovely...would make a nice Valentine poem for a card
Love and smiles
~Lilac
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Simply Beautiful
Nyetta my friend
You have the most amazing heart...You leave your love on our pages my sweet friend and we are all blessed...
Thank you so much for sharing this with us really...
Ek is baie lief vir jou
Tes -
beautiful
So romantic is this lovely poem!
Unique and so sweet
Keep the Sunshine coming
Lynda
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Oh how very romantic and perfect that I read it this morning on Valentine's Day. Well penned, I love love poems. Very nice, creative, made personal by your use of language.
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Fantastic!!!!!
This is the second I have read this one and let me say it is still just as beautiful as they was the first time. Just amazingly written. Keep your beautiful pen flowing!! -
A true Valentines Day write ~
My little Sunshine Girl ~
Perfect timing with this piece ~
~ From there on
Each page I turn,
The words I find
Are filled with you. ~
Happy Valentines Day!
Uncle Bear ~
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Thanks Uncle Bear! That is one I had written for someone very special! and well with Valentines Day this week, thought I would put this one in the Lair!
Love ya,
Nyetta
Happy Valentines Day to you too my dear uncle.
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Wow, i absolutly love this. The metaphor of life in a the pages of a book is just amazing. Theres poem called "Metaphor" but the poet's name escapes me. I have it on my computer so when I find it i'll send it to you. It really reminded me of that poem and I think you would like it. Great job!
Ro
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a very sweet poem, very origional and well written. thank you for your entry, and good luck
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Fantastic!!!!!!!
If I had to pick a favorite part of this, I would have to copy and paste the entire piece here! You have done an amazing job on this one. And as you turn those pages, you will find my love there. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece. Keep that golden pencil of your flowing. Best of luck in the contest.
Love
Jim
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Your poem has a very light and airy feel to it that works well with the subject matter. Was there a reason the full word, "tomorrow" wasn't used in the last stanza? "'morrow" kinda distracted me from the rest of the poem, as I spent more time trying to figure out why it was used than to the lovely words you've penned. This reminds me a lot of the cards I see in the stores around Valentine's Day, simple but getting the point across nicely.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
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Sweet and tender
I loved it, sis... Can't say more than that...
Lots of
z
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Honey...
This was simply amazing...I loved every line and I can't say much more...It flowed perfectly and I love it...
Thanks for sharing...I feel as if it could be dedicated to someone I know but that is a secret for me to keep
Love you bunches
Tes
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Ah mom yet another amazing and oh so sweet poem, I love it! And I see everyone else agrees with me! The problem of commenting after so many others has is that everything is said already...
Love ya
Chelli -
Oh my how your talent is expanding, I have seen so much growth in such a short amount of time, I am really proud of you dear.
I love this one, you did an awesome job! -
Awesome write
This is a very loving and unique piece i love it i love the structure and flow it went nicely .....Michael -
Awesome Write
very awesome write. I really like this one. You never dissapoint with your great poetry.
Love ya,
Luke -
you always come up with the cutest things to write about, and no matter what it is you write your heart out, that's just amazing. this poem is so sweet and touching, and you fill it with love.
great job. and keep it up.
joyce
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Oh, I love this! It's so sweet and wonderful....
I think the last three lines of the last stanza could be reworded, because right now, it's really passive. I think if those lines were more powerful, it would add alot to the poem. Maybe if you wrote:
"let me find
you true love
written there"
But, 'tis just a suggestion, with no need to be followed.
Again, nice job.
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*flips through my book* look! i have love on my pages as well!
i LOVED this one, mom! great idea and great poem! love ya!
Love, Little One -
wow, what an awesome poem, this is wonderful, great flow with a good story...............Joe
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