Everytime you left,
I should have hugged you one last time.
I should have told you that I loved you
and hated those goodbyes.
Everytime you held me,
I should have told you that I cared
I should have told you if you needed me,
I would always have been there.
Everytime you kissed my head,
in that affectionate loving way.
I should have made my feelings clearer then,
and told you seeing you made my day.
Everytime you laughed,
and spent the whole day with me,
I thought I could live in that moment
and never wanted to go back to reality.
Everytime I saw that sparkle,
that dazzling gleem in your eyes,
I felt a tingling and thump in my heart
and hoped you would always be at my side.
Everytime I had a chance,
I thought I'd get another one,
I never thought I'd leave it long enough
I never thought you would be gone.
Everytime I start to think about it,
these familiar tears start to fall.
Because you never knew I loved you,
you never knew you were my all.
Everytime I sit by your grave,
I regret not telling you,
I wish I'd just said those three little words
because they will always stand true.
[-I love you-]
Author notes
i wrote this on the spot it is very late, and i dont think this is that bad, i think i am done, i may add more it edit...
learn a lesson people, tell the one you love all the time, they may never know...
Written September 17th, 2006
wrote it a while ago but hey... For Joleahes contest - 4. love is truly beautiful when you find it. I want the best love poems you can come up with...lost love, true love, sad love, whatever love you truly have or believe in.
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A contest entry
- LoveLoveLoveLoveLove... by And Hyetal.
400 points, ended October 22, 2006, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Over 100 Options and everyone needs to enter! by joleahe.
550 points, ended November 20, 48 entries
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Oh my god this was heart breaking! I'm so sorry!
This is probably one of my favorite. Its from the heart and if you read it like I did, it has a good message.
Thank you for opening up.
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Oh, it's sooo sad but it send a message. You should always tell someone you love them before it's too late...
Thanks for entering my contest!!! Woot!!!
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i have just reread the poem, and i still have the same opinion it is so fing amazing, you are such a talented poet, keep up the good work, hope to see more soon
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this is a great poem big sis, who did you write it for/bout? have you read my new one called life & love its really kool.
--Blessed be--
love always your lil sis
Bradhadair -
*points back* damn straight thanky for the comment *bows*
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The last stanza was my overall favorite bit about this. A truly heart string pulling poem. points to raven This is my twinny! lol
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thanks for this comment, i wasnt even tryin to make it rhyme i just wrote it, so i didnt write it to rhyme, but thanks all the same
laura -
gosh...its so sad...
esp the ending - i thought it was sad at the beginnin - n then the end just made it even more tragic
great write - u realy captured the sadness - n great job on the rhymin
gudluck in the contest thingy =]
-gina -
This makes me want to cry. I don't know what else to say. It's beautiful Larua, thanks SO much for sharing this with us. It's a message everyone relates but few actually practice. Like the proverb says, "Praised by many, practiced by few".
Thanks again,
~Kellogs -
Really good poem, though the rhyme scheme is off just a bit here and there, it really is an awesome piece.
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absolute beauty within a sad story...you got me at the end...nice flow as well.
xxxooo
~wolf~ -
is it about somebody who didn't say they loved somebody until it was too late? i think i got that from the poem. if not you can tell me. i really liked this, apart from the person dying at the end, although then it shows us all that you always have so many chances to say something but you dont, and then you regret it when its too late..i must say that my favourite part it:
"Everytime i saw that sparkle,
that dazzling gleem in your eyes,
i felt a tingling and thump in my heart
and hoped you would always be at my side" i think that part like builds up to the end well done
greg
x
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