Suppose that when you fall asleep
you really just awake,
and all the things we think are real
are nothing but a fake,
maybe we just look at things
the other way around,
for of the two there's not a lot
of difference to be found,
you wake up in the morning
your dreams all fade away,
you go to sleep at night
and you don't recall today,
on waking some remember
meeting someone who is dead,
but when asleep you never dream
you're tucked up home in bed,
like negative and positive
both sides need one another,
but sometimes it is difficult
to tell one from the other.
Author notes
Written September 17th, 2006
A contest entry
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What did you think
Comments
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Beautifully done. Realities are something that tend to be fleeting and confusing at time. I really enjoyed reading this. Nicely done
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I love, love, LOVE this!! Omg, you've put everything I've ever wanted to ask about fantasy and reality in this poem- yeah, what's real and what's not? Who's to say that our waking reality is more real than our dreams at night?
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hmmm definately makes the think this one... as you really can never know.
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Thank you for entering the contest, I thought this fit my prompt really well and it was very well written! The meter seemed a little off in the beginning but that got better towards the end. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Beautiful. I really enojyed this read. Thanks for entering your wiining poem.
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very true indeed
This is a thought I am sure many can relate to, nicely written and look at all the trophies you have won, just speaks for what a good write this, well done and thank you for entering, good luck in the contest
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Wow.... this definatly deserved all the trophies that you got for it.
Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
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serious clown I have wondered this So weird someone else has these same thoughts. Excellent write Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck Congratulations on all the trophies
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Reminds me of the movie the Matrix, very nicely done best of luck to you in this contest...Scott
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Very well penned.
Obviously....look at all the trophies!
Best of luck in the contest.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Perfect!
This is such a great description of how I feel it scares me. You made it rhyme which makes you that more creative and tallented. One of my favorite poems on here. Excellent
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Hello, again! I was looking at the poems in the contest of Mercury Rising, and I was astonished to see you're here, too. I re-read the poem, and I just had to tell you: I like it even more. Best of luck!
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A very interesting and cleverly written poem that was a real pleasure to read. Congratulations on winning all those trophys with this wonderful poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
Mercury Rising
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thanks for entering and good luck. great poem.
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Very good. I'm sure this will get see me fly 2 to think real hard. Thanks for entering our contest.
Good luck.
Brian -
Yes, it is a wonder that isn't it. I often thought of similar things. But yes, what if our dreams are actually our reality, and when we dream our apparent 'dream self' tells you not to let your dreams (what we percieve as reality) get to you? It's confusing, but is very interesting to think about.
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Beautifully penned, and also rather thought-provoking. Thanks for entering & best of luck in my contest.
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I like the rhyme and thoughts here. Reminds me of a book.
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damn! that was sooooooooooooooo good! excellent job! I really enjoyed reading this! the trophies you won are well deserved with this piece! definitely a five star poem!!! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Reminds me of: "a man dreaming he is a butterfly dreaming he is a man"....Very thought provoking...This is a truth :
"like negative and positive
both sides need one another,"
People tend not to want to face that the negative
is part of the whole...a duality, one cannot be with out the other....Some of my work of late is along this theme.
Well, very well executed....congrats on the gold!
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EXCELLENT
brillinat write!!!congratulations!
so intriguing! I confess that you;ve manage to create in here quite a maze of words with taht special twist of idea in the end which makes it all so amazingly challanging!well done indeed!well done!
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'you wake up in the morning
your dreams all fade away,
you go to sleep at night
and you don't recall today,'
that line perfectly describes the similarities in them which leads to the ending lines of:
'but sometimes it is difficult
to tell one from the other.'
i love how it all tied in throughout the entire poem. and i feel that using the title to ask the question just was beautifully stated. after reading that poem, one would almost be forced to ask... are we dreaming?
very nice. i loved it.
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O-k, this piece has left me...
Speechless.
I thought there weren't going to be a lot of entries, but there were. I thought I wasn't going to be so surprised, but I AM! I truly am, dear writter.
It's a wonderful take on a controversed subject; the truth can be sometimes the most difficult thing to understand of all.
But, as my favourite part, I would have to quote:
"you wake up in the morning
your dreams all fade away,
you go to sleep at night
and you don't recall today,"
Is everything just a memory? Is everything just a fake...illusion?
Marvelous piece, thanks for entering, and good luck!
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ooh interesting. It's weird thinking that maybe none of this is actually happening and it's all just a dream.
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this is lovely it rteally does get you thinking lol
"Suppose that when you fall asleep
you really just awake,
and all the things we think are real
are nothing but a fake" that is just powerful well done good luck in my contest
laura xx -
oh great can only imagine the dreams I am gonna have tonight.. I so wish with every fiber of my being that once this would have been true..
Sigh.. but of course we don't
get what we actually wish for do we?
Great write,
Take Care,
Catressa
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ABSOLUTELY AMAZING
LOVED IT, LOVED IT, LOVED IT ~ this poem made me sit and think for a minute and i like it when a poem can do that to me! this was such a great, powerful write. so beautiful. "you wake up in the morning / your dreams all fade away, / go to sleep at night / and you don't recall today" this part caught my eye especially. there is so much truth to that actually. beautiful. i loved it!
~b*e*e~
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very nice
it has a rhythym and it rhymes very easily..i like the message and truly to the perception of things there is much truth here; very well done and creative
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This is really cool. I think like this and have wondered the same way...but its amazing you put it into poem. Bravo and congrads for silver.
NoL
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this is a brilliant write. i totally agree with slightlyFey ...
you wake up in the morning
your dreams all fade away,
you go to sleep at night
and you don't recall today,
... these are the four lines that grabbed me the most. they are beautiful.
fantastic job!
congrats on the trophies.
Til
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makes you think!
great job on this poem, it really does get you thinking and pondering. great flow of words as well
"you wake up in the morning
your dreams all fade away,
you go to sleep at night
and you don't recall today"
this was my fav lines, it so caputured these moments
well done
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I Aplaud you my dear poet.
This is indeed a superb poem, i love the flow and the feel it inspires one to think upon something very possiable but simply taken for granted.
Again i love this poem and i look forward to reading more of your work.
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This is awesome! I love it. I often have thought from this prespective myself, amused by what life would actully be. People flying, running from several-headed monsters that disappear and reappear. Randomness. Chaos. Maybe they are both real. Maybe we live in two realities without knowing it.haha. Great write, I enjoyed it!
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a lovely write..kinda different..its like u dint present any two contrasting themes together but u showed two contrast side of one theme..thats very nice
i loved ur flow and best of luck in my contest
regards
abuyi
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I like this.
This poem is like one big oxymoron. It flows and rhymes very well which I enjoyed and did not feel forced. Thanks for entering the contest.
Andy
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Thank you very much for your comments and applause,I really appreciate it, best wishes---Norman
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Thank you so much for your comments, they are greatly appreciated, best wishes---Norman
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this is the type of poem that has the reader wondering what is real. you've touched on concept (idea), which can inspire if one lets their mind float in that direction
nicely done
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deep
This was very deep and thought provoking.You've done a wonderful job.Thanks for sharing it with us I enjoyed reading it.
Kari -
Thanks for your comments,I appreciate your point of view,but it's supposed to be a idea,not a theory,thanks again, best wishes
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Thank you so much for your comments and applause,so glad you liked the poem,I suppose the subject could be debated for years really,the funny thing about sleep is the fact that we can;t live without it,yet there is no reason why we need it,when we sleep we use just as many muscles as when awake,so we don't really rest at all,so the debate goes on, best wishes---Norman
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Thanks for your comments,I'm glad it could bring back some pleasant memories, best wishes---Norman
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Thank you very much for your comments and applause,I'm so glad you liked the poem,I really do appreciate it, best wishes---Norman
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Well, listen, comon peoples...thought-provoking? Bah! I'd never go that far...I mean, comon! But, fun and amusing and clever and well written and well-constructed and free-flowing and worth a second read...sure...no doubt--even funny as hell (almost). But thought provoking?? Really? Seriously, peeps, some of you make me wonder...are you honestly taking this...as even a slim possiblity? Sheesh...nice poem though.
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A very thought provoking piece of work.
I have sometimes wondered if when we are sleeping. Are we just off into another dimension possibly in between life and death. And the people that we sometimes visit in our dreams have also broken through that same dimension, making it possible to communicate. If that makes any sense at all....I thought your rhyme in this was exceptional and the flow of your words made the piece strong and steady. Very well done...I really enjoyed this pen.....Nice job!!!
Smiles
your way >>>>>>> Sandy San-d
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love this piece, made me think of when i met my grandfather in my dreams, thank you
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I'm in love with this poem, its one of my new favorites. It was fantastic!- Arron
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you really do make people think with this poem! because imagine if what you write is true and while we are "awake" we are really asleep or if we are already dead but we are in heaven looking over our life and we don't even realise it spooky LOL... anyways great write you, the rhyme and flow of this poem are awesome good luck in this contest i hope you place so let me know if you do after it is judged
im me or something cos i actually want you to place cos i like your poems especially this one! anyways much love
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The last 4 lines I really liked, and the rhyme is very good with this poem. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your comments and applause,I agree it does seem like a parallel universe,if so I wonder how many more there are, best wishes---Norman
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Excellent
This is an awesome and thought provoking piece. I believe that when we sleep it is like a parallel universe we travel to. Things in dreams are far too 'real' to not be real. This is an excellent piece and best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your comments,I really appreciate them,sorry about the grammar,I must have been asleep,or was I awake, best wishes---Norman
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This makes me think very much. I like this write but I felt you could have tidied it just a bit. I'm a grammar freak so yeah. But other than that, you succeeded in stumping me. Very good write, I hope you place.
Love,
Marisa
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Thanks for your comment and applaus,it is supposed to get people thinking,preferably while they're awake,or is it asleep, best wishes.
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thought provoking write clown
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That's a very interesting theory. I like it, makes me wonder. Very good work.
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I love this! Very thought provoking. Great flow by the way. All of it kind of rolled off the tongue. Very, very, cool. Keep writing.
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