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Slivers Of A Broken Heart (the song)

VERSE 1:
Here I sit frozen in fear,
With my lost love's souvenir;
Your photograph in my hand,
Turned grim by a heart's remand.
Crimson stains mar this token
Of one more romance broken
By savage words unspoken.

CHORUS 1:
Slivers of my broken heart
Slowly slit my throat apart,
Spilling the innocent soul
And giving your ghost control.
Your emerald eyes impart
That this thirst will not depart;
You will always own my heart.

VERSE 2:
My mind knew reality
But all this brutality
Has now turned me quite insane
And has altered my domain.
So I weep while the walls bleed,
The floor crawls with bugs that breed,
And tears make my skin recede.

CHORUS 2:
'Cause, slivers of my broken heart
Slowly slit my throat apart,
Spilling the innocent soul
And giving your ghost control.
Your emerald eyes impart
That this thirst will not depart;
You will always own my heart.

VERSE 3:
Broken I reach for a blade
To end despair's masquerade;
As I carve into my wrist
I feel my spirit resist.
Angels now surround me here
Mourning as my death draws near
And I start to disappear.

CHORUS 3:
While, slivers of my broken heart
Slowly slit my throat apart,
Spilling the innocent soul
And giving your ghost control.
Your emerald eyes impart
That this thirst will not depart;
You will always own my heart.

BRIDGE:
Death hasn't forced you away,
Only fueled my soul's decay,
And added to my dismay.

CHORUS 4:
For, slivers of my broken heart
Slowly slit my throat apart,
Spilling the innocent soul
And giving your ghost control.
Your emerald eyes impart
That this thirst will not depart;
You will always own my heart.

CHORUS 5:
Yeah, slivers of my broken heart
Slowly slit my throat apart,
Spilling the innocent soul
And giving your ghost control.
Your emerald eyes impart
That this thirst will not depart;
You will always own my heart.

Author notes

I took one of my previous poems and added to it and changed it to make it my very first song I have ever written!
Written September 17th, 2006

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  • Vagabond
    February 1, 2007
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    Looooooooooooooooong song. Good work anyways, and thanks for taking the time to enter my contest.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 19, 2006

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    This is a very sad, brutal song... Would be a good song for the Smiths to sing, or something... Though powerful and meaningful, I can feel how someone can just stick in your head and you'll do anything to get rid of them in your head, even kill yourself. Simple but brutal. Good luck in the contest.


  • Emmjay
    November 2, 2006
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    Great for your first song!

    Yeh, this is great for your very first song , born from a poem! The rhyme works well in both verse and chorus. the rhythm/beat/meter of the piece seems a bit over the place, in areas, but that will only improve with more songwriting. Maybe it's just the way I'm reading it.
    Best wishes in the contest
    Sincerely -Emmjay

  • OurxBeginning
    September 26, 2006
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    Wow, for your first song, it's really good. I adored Verse 3 a lot. I can relate to that very much. I felt all of the emotion in this and I like that you're so creative with your words. Amazing job and keep it up.

    x


  • Inside and out
    September 18, 2006
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    This is your first song? Well done dear poet. Your rhythm is constant and your rhyme is natural. Very nicely done. Thank you for entering this contest.


  • -- - -
    September 17, 2006
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    do you plan to further this with music?
    i would like to hear,even if you yourself dont sing it.

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