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Stigmata

Locked in the frozen beauty of her mind
And chained by fevered desires of the flesh,
Wandering between islands of mankind
And foul dark waters that make souls retch.

Fear reigns with each drop of infected
Blood on burning skin, the holy myth
Of God's touch. Stigmata of a tainted
Soul, such suffering He calls a gift.

Yet still the hand of Lucifer holds tight
To a thrilled and yielding body, pulled
Back from God and to the Fallen's rite
That leaves her reeling and enthralled.

Torn between being Day's Saint and Night's Whore,
An innocent caught in the eternal Holy War.

Author notes

I hope it's okay, but this a mix between Option 1 (a sonnet) and Option 2-C (the picture).

I have written this with a particular idea in mind, but I would rather keep it quiet and leave this for people's own views, whether they want to take it literally as a story about a woman being pulled between God and Lucifer, or if it's metaphoric for the inner struggle that many people go through in life. Please see it however you wish :-) And apologies for the rather obvious title, but I can't think of anything else at the moment...suggestions are welcome :-)
Written September 17th, 2006

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  • individuality gold member
    September 22, 2006
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    it is a good piece though the flow of the sonnet is off in many places with the rhythm. mostly sonnets are done using iambic pentameter. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • Nanette
    September 19, 2006
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    Just as I thought, you are a master poet! This is a brilliant write with such 'force' - passion and bizarrely inviting...!! I love it!!


  • BrokenFiend
    September 18, 2006
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    An amazing, deep and beautiful poem. Such beauty, and in the sonnet...such emotion. I loved the flow and the beauty of the words. She really ended up being a great character, with...well, depth.


  • PrincessLointaine
    September 17, 2006
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    A beautiful poem! I loved it...such passion, such sadness...I loved the flow of it. Thank you so much for posting this Why? Because it was another chance to enjoy the beauty that is your work!

    PrincessLointaine


  • Menecairiel
    September 17, 2006
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    A beautiful Shakespearean sonnet, but with a feeling of Milton's Paradise Lost just hanging off its fingertips. I think the punctuation was excellent, and the language and metaphors and imagery wonderful. I saw this as a good person's struggles against her darker side, her sexual desires and her fascination with darkenss. A really beautiful sonnet. Thank you so much for entering, and keep the ink flowing, CBminstrel

    Menecairiel


  • backlog
    September 17, 2006
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    I personally know someone who only "discovered" the love of Jesus again, after years of believing God had deserted her. She dressed in the black robes, she became satanic, not in the completely demonic sense, but followed Lucifer's religion.

    I'm not religious myself, and to me it is more the struggle between hope, and desperation


  • otepsaint
    September 17, 2006
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    beautiful

    Stigmata of a tainted
    Soul, such suffering He calls a gift.
    ^^^^^^^^^ I really like this part, the poem itself has great rythem and flow, but the puncuation kind of makes it hard to see that, alot of people will refuse to look past that, well besides the poem is amazing i love the beat to it, or at least the beat it had to me, great metaphore also, it hit kind of hard for me, i have been dealing with such a problem alot lately so your poem was very "heavy" for me, well anyways keep up the great work


  • Sacred Ground
    September 17, 2006
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    Very creative, but dark. A good read.


  • macandrew
    September 17, 2006
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    Don't know if this might help but I often write out my poems as prose to check the flow and punctuation. For example:

    Locked in the frozen beauty of her mind And chained by fevered desires of the flesh, Wandering between islands of mankind
    And foul dark waters that make souls retch.

    Then options come easier:

    Locked in the frozen beauty of her mind and chained by fevered desires of the flesh she wanders between islands of mankind,
    amidst foul dark waters that make souls retch.

    Just thoughts.
    John

  • sylva MD poetry
    September 17, 2006
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    deep meanings needs further analysis

    frozen beauty is angelical word.had difficult to understand infected blood.whas the person sick ..AIDS..


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 17, 2006
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    Such a creative write yoou have penned here - l like the title as it says it all - nothing else can say this with the same deep meaning - picture accompanies this so well. Very well written sonnet with good rhythm and rhyme, flow and such deep meaning. See where one could take it at face value or use the metaphoric meaning as well.

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