There's A Hammering In My Head
A Nervous Lack Of Self Control
Then The Feeling Hits Me
Like Bleeding Heroin...
...Interveinously...
...Through My Soul
This Cancerous Infestation
Brings Seizures Of Delight
A Necroscopic Embrace
Inside Myself I Fight
Possessed With Such Voracity
Which Of Me Will Win
The Acrid Smell Of Flesh
Pulling Back And Searing From Within
Nails Rake Across My Limbs
Trying To Draw This Poison Out
My Ribcage Snaps Back In Half
So The Other Can Climb Out
Face To Face I See Myself
Which Is Real? And What Should Be?
Myself I Am Reborn
From This Rotting Husk Of Me
Author notes
Written July 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- Dark, scary, and everything inbetween by horrorfanatic.
400 points, ended November 13, 2006, 43 entries
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Bronze trophy winner
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330 points, ended July 23, 2007, 27 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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I loved the darkness that this portrays..though I wish it was a little longer.
Thank you for entering and good luck
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
very dark!!
i love this
"This Cancerous Infestation
Brings Seizures Of Delight
A Necroscopic Embrace
Inside Myself I Fight
Possessed With Such Voracity
Which Of Me Will Win"
these lines are so creative and thought out!
"Nails Rake Across My Limbs
Trying To Draw This Poison Out
My Ribcage Snaps Back In Half
So The Other Can Climb Out
Face To Face I See Myself
Which Is Real? And What Should Be?
Myself I Am Reborn
From This Rotting Husk Of Me"
at first this made me quiver but now i just love these lines and the unsettlety!!
great write!
--kat
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This was a good write. I felt a lot of dark passion behind your words. You painted a vivid picture. powerfull imagery. I liked the lines,
"The Acrid Smell Of Flesh
Pulling Back And Searing From Within
Nails Rake Across My Limbs"
Well done.
I am glad to have read this poem. Keep up the good work.
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This is probably one of the darkest poems I have ever read that didn't leave me feeling like I had just read a bunch of mindless dribble! The thoughts reflected here are very intense. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
♥ Touchof1der -
wow.
This sounds like something an addict would write. My brother writs like this some times. But any way...
This poem holds gerat meaning nad , some wonderful imagery.
This poem made me feel, almost lke i was trapped, and then the sense of rebirth at the end. it was wonderfull and made me shiver.
Great job.
~ANgel
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Face To Face I See Myself
Which Is Real? And What Should Be?
Myself I Am Reborn
From This Rotting Husk Of Me
I love your description touching the truth of life here..I can see the depth of the realization in your words here in this poem bringing a kind of the different tone in the muse and knocking the soul somewhere inside..well done
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absolutely amazing. unlike some of your other critics, i find the capitals a genious touch. they emphasize each word and make the cadence so much stronger. you can litterally feel every word in your chest as your mind deciphers the oh so morbid meaning of the lines being read. you are definitely a master of imagery. i commend you and look forward to future works.
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awsome!
i like this alot, it flows nicely, and makes me gigglezssss at the horror!
great job =]
stephanie
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This is very thought provoking and very sharp in terms of its images and interpretations my friend. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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THis was a good piece. It read very well. I liked the lines "This Cancerous Infestation
Brings Seizures Of Delight"
Well done. Keep up the good work. -
this is good
I like this write,you have a strong delivery,with very vivid and forcefull words! thumbs up -
This is definately, definately not my cup of tea, but for what it is - "Dark, Scary, and everything in between" -- it's not that bad at all
Nicely written, and congratulations on your bronze trophy, which is well deserved
Be blessed -
just the way i like it?
Words are beautiful! And you clearly portrayed it in your poem. Love it. -
brutally beautiful...awesome job!
You are a commander of words, you use them so bravely
and courageously, spilling out OUR guts with every
word! Damn this was so chilling. What an inspiration
and powerful writer you are!!!!!
Thankyou will study and learn from you!!
great job!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Very deep and dark with vivid imagery, that appeals to the senses. Overall the flow is steady and I like the rhyming. I must agree though that I don't like every word capitalized, it detracts from the flow, because it's distracting. Nicely done.
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"Nails Rake Across My Limbs" I love this part. This is really amazing! Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!
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I'm seeing this is two different lights, the first is an inner demon which I LOVE and the second is a battle with schizophrenia which I'd be suggesting you get help for if it's the case.
Great work though, the imagery is just BRILLIANT!! Amazing, truly amazing.
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intriguing...
...for sure... I found it disturbing and compelling!
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Creepy but cool. I like the thoughts. You closing lines were my favorite.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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Another piece with all capitals. 2 in a row, actually. I'm curious as to why they were used. I find it a distraction, really.
Other than that, this is a nice piece.
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very interesting. good read.
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I'm so glad you told me to read this one!
It's genious, I love it.
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A dark deep one. I like I like
But not like every other poem you read "Bleah blah death blah blah blah" Nice and different, which is what the poetry world need these days. A vivd beauitfully dark image created and a lovely flow of words
well done
~*Lauren*~ -
whoa awesome/amazing/brillent!! damn that was nice. and the sculls on the side just added to it.!
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It has an interesting flow and rhyme and a nice cadence to the lines. Only thought would be to not capitalize all the words in it. It distracts from the natural flow this has. All in all nice work!
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wow this is an amazing poem and its so vivid i can see everything taking place...
jay -
Oh dark. Very original. Intriguing... I loved it. Keep up the good work
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