How do you feel now?
All your dreams....gone
Flew away like my love for you
Flowing away, down the river
And into the sea
You never noticed me once
I felt isolated
Empty inside
My eyes cried the tears
You never saw
Because you never cared
If you truly loved me
You would have seen
The hurt you caused to me
I used to smile around you
But it was fake
The tears I cried
Washed away any love
I once had for you
If you truly cared
You would have seen
Our rose, turning into
A sharp thorny twig
You always blamed me
Shouted at me for crying
For what you thought
Was no reason
You always made me believe
That our problems
Were caused by me
But you can't play the victim this time
Your neglect made my eyes cry
Your pushing away made me feel empty
Your straying eyes made me
Want to lash out and scream
Your cold heart made me realise
You never cared for me
I was a tool for you
Until someone better came along
Now my heart is empty
But my soul is free
Free from the deceit you showed me
Free from the lies you told me
Free from the grasp that once trapped me
Our rose died long ago
However I only just saw
As the petals wilted away
One by one
Blown away in the wind
Carrying the love I once bore for you
Which can never be revived
I've made up my mind
Maybe we will meet again
Who knows?
But until then, farewell
And good riddance
Author notes
Ok. I chose to write a poem about a song or quote (option 7) I picked the song Call me when You're sober and based the poem around the song. I used the line, you can't play the victem this time. The poem is based on the depression from being trapped in a loveless relationship, and could be classed as a sequal to my poem A dieing rose. It is also about being set free from a relationship that relationship, how the hurt is still there, but the feelings are gone forever. Hope you like it 
Written September 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Fighting The Darkness(Cutting,Eating Disorders,Abuse,Depression,Suicide) by XXBrunettexBarbieXX.
300 points, ended October 1, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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SO BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN
So beautifully written, it is as if this is from your own experience and it is your heart that is hurting.
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Thankyou ^.^
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X cellente!!
Great write with an evanescence feel to it...
VERY powerfully written..
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Thanks
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Excellent
This is an awesome and powerful piece and you have done a great job of turning the song into this poem. Thanks for sharing and good luck in contest.
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Evanescence is one of my favourite bands. The song that got me into them was My immortal. Purely because their songs have deep and meaningful lyrics to them. As for the poem. I'm glad you liked it. It took me ages to think up what to write about. Your contest is definately challenging. That is good, because it brings out all the good poets from the bad. Good luck with the contest . It is awesome
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awesome!
Hey!
Wow this is a great poem! I love the way you choose Call me When Your Sober for inspiration. That is one of my all time favorite songs and evanescence rocks they are a band that trully have meaning to their lyrics and music. This poem had an amazing flow and was powerful. It flowed like the call me when your sobber song and actually could be a song. You are talented.
My favorite part was:
You never noticed me once
I felt isolated
Empty inside
My eyes cried the tears
You never saw
Because you never cared
If you truly loved me
You would have seen
The hurt you caused to me
I used to smile around you
But it was fake
The tears I cried
Washed away any love
I once had for you
If you truly cared
You would have seen
Our rose, turning into
A sharp thorny twig
You always blamed me
Shouted at me for crying
For what you thought
Was no reason
You always made me believe
That our problems
Were caused by me
But you can't play the victim this time
Your neglect made my eyes cry
Your pushing away made me feel empty
Your straying eyes made me
Want to lash out and scream
Your cold heart made me realise
You never cared for me
I was a tool for you
Until someone better came along
Now my heart is empty
But my soul is free
Free from the deceit you showed me
Free from the lies you told me
Free from the grasp that once trapped me
Our rose died long ago
However I only just saw
As the petals wilted away
One by one
Blown away in the wind
Carrying the love I once bore for you
Which can never be revived
these stanza's were all very powerful and strong. Keep writting and thnx for sharing. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Keep writting your awesome at it!!!
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Thankyou
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I liked this piece, Angel. It does show the death of a relationship and the birth of something else. Though a bit empty. Wonderful piece. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks . I'm glad you liked it
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Deep
This was soooooo very deep....I could feel the pain in the poem..thanks for sharing it with us. Good luck in the contest.
Kari
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