the time of death has fallen on us
when our chance to say "goodbye is here"
the light fades slow as it turns to dust
and we must go, then disappear
the life we've lived, with fun and dispair
has made our time on Earth worth while
then God's hand shows up from this air
to take us to our final trial
our final trial, the last test of our days
has come to us at last
i say "goodbye, my love" as we part our ways
as i watch the gate that you pass
Heaven's door, so clean with no rust
a magnificent sight to be near
as my sight of you fades slow while i turn to dust
and i must go, then disappear
Author notes
this poem was actually an idea i got from the play, Romeo and Juliet because of my language arts class. anyway, the prologue was what got to me because we went over the rhyming scheme and what everything meant, so i really liked it. then, i went to detention, where i was bored that day, and decided to write a poem. and you know what? i used the same format as the prologue. anyway, ironically, the poem is somewhat based off of Romeo and Juliet without me even knowing it till i was done, but i kinda go off a little. instead, i said that when we die together (like romeo and juliet), you are too good for me, and i dont deserve you, so go to heaven. or something along those lines.
Written September 16th, 2006
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What a wonderful write! So beautiful and strong in imagery of what life will be like after death. Deep and smooth flow.
Nice job!
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Wow! Gr8 job and how superb. Well penned and has poignant view of 'afterlife'. Inspiring and flows well. Hope 2 read more from u! -theQueen"
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lovely poem,
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I liked reading this, it is sweet and yet sad. the
descriptiveness is very good. I can almost see that
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I kindof wondered about the form... looked familiar. it's a great write, i enjoyed it. Duckie.
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i like the idea you have for this poem as i read in your comment. it was obvious to me as i was reading this too and your comment just confirmed it
to me it's original and clever. you've done a good job with this and should be proud
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