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Naked whispers



Sara, sara

Ssshhhh, hush.

Soothing words,

Let them rest

On your soul.

Come in to me,

Leave me

In your thoughts;

As essences of

Cacao and vanilla

Over-saturate,

Til they seep desire.

My words wash,

Abstract wishes

Of toffee colours that sigh,

Across the opaque white

Of your marshmallow flesh.

Naked whispers;

Soft shimmers

Leave the shade of a shiver,

Sara, I want you,

Give yourself…

Feel the touch of me.

Let’s drift a while;

Then be captured

And consumed

By the deep breaths of waves

That heave through my mind.

Til then, relax in serenity;

Hear the ocean’s swell

Whisper,

Sara, sara

You’re mine.


© sarajane

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The Kiss, Gustav Klimt.

Option 4
Written September 16th, 2006

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  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    November 10, 2006
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    pure class !!

    still going through some of your works, and this one is magic, great soft expression with an image to enhance the read, great job, another classic from you.


  • Patience15
    October 27, 2006
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    AWWWW this was so beautiful. He wants her and yet he says it so romantically. Really a great piece. Greay job. Emily

  • Dobar Dan
    September 28, 2006
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    excellent

    very good - you capture the monent sara


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 27, 2006
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    Beautiful piece

    Beautiful. Just beautiful. Keep writing.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 21, 2006
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    I like the infusion of both color and taste that you have brought to this piece with your well chosen words. I thought you presented this in a manner most fitting and appealing to the eye as well. Like a fine wine, there was much to savor here. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • September 19, 2006
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    Very deep and senual this write is, has just a warm romantic vibe that really sticks with you after you finish reading it. Nice job!

    Please check out some of writting I would love to get some feed back from you.

    Much Luv 2ya
    S/Zero


  • Snakehips Pete
    September 19, 2006
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    My last girl friend really loved a good hard poling up the Klimt/ No seriously, this is a jolly fine effort, begorrah, and all and all. And I shall applaud thusly.


  • stolen heart
    September 19, 2006
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    good

    weel then...... this was REALLY good. i started reading this expecting it to be just mediocre but it really moved me! good write! i love the wispered sara sara.. good write! keep writing!
    Kat


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 19, 2006
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    Excellant

    A nice poem, but difficult to read. Type face: nice style, but font to small. Color of print on background makes this piece difficult to read. Other than that a very good write.

  • Son of Jim
    September 19, 2006
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    Sara,
    this was an unusual read for me. I kept reflecting back on your name, and then of course the contest. It was soft and touching and loving. Good luck, I enjoyed this piece of passion.


  • Iohagh
    September 19, 2006
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    Darling sara...

    Your write so worships
    without the later flip
    as all feelings become
    for a moment one.

    Smooshies

    Janet

  • afireinthisheart
    September 19, 2006
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    breathtaking beautiful

    written with softness...with beauty and very senusal...a captivating write...smile...Dave


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    September 19, 2006
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    Sooo beautiful! I love it! Very well done!
    All the best to you in the contest!


  • XxContinualSlinkyxX
    September 19, 2006
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    OMG! I so love this lol its so awesome and very detailed...keep writing ill read for sure...comment on my stuff? ♥'s *~Windy~*

  • Deciphering silence
    September 19, 2006
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    I think your poem is tasty!!!!


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    excellent

    This is an excellent write.Toffee colours.....breaths of waves made it a exciting read.felt warm breaths touching in sweet contours all over my face.Keep up the terrific work. Good write.
    ...............a beating ballady of a song.....undulating rythym.................god its well done.......................................... Hey, you write really good....keep it up


  • Ice phantom
    September 18, 2006
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    good luck

    nice job on these write i casn feel the emotion in it good luck in the contest


  • white stone
    September 18, 2006
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    Ahh romance, the sweetest intoxiacnt found on this such wide earth. sensual and captivating indeed. Look forward to reading more of your work soon.


  • Sensual Sapphire
    September 18, 2006
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    I have felt a kiss that left me devoid of any feeling it was deep and should have made the blood sing, I have felt a kiss so chaste in design that made blood roar and boil with the desire to take it deeper to swallow the owner of those lips in a sea of passion. Beautiful.

  • Uriah Hamilton
    September 17, 2006
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    Yes, very sensual, lucky the man whispering such words!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 16, 2006
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    Superb/romantic/unique/fun

    Very nicely done. Romantic with just a light touch or eroticism.


  • Swtpoetryman
    September 16, 2006
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    OH SO SENSUAL AND SWEET!

    Oh, SARA, SARA - i wish you were mine - if only in my dreams! A fine piece to read before retiring to bed for the evening! GOOD LUCK in the contest, Darling! I TRULY ENJOYED this, indeed and will be DELIGHTED to leave you a STANDING O for sharing it with me today!!
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.

  • Rumer
    September 16, 2006
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    Oh wow. Very well done. This is elegant and flows with such a soft sensual feeling....while leaving one very warm inside!
    I envy your talent of writing, this is super!
    I enjoyed it. Rumer


  • mitimse
    September 16, 2006
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    wrinle the sheets---make the bed--wrinkle the sheets---make the bed----wrinkle the sheets--make the--to heck with it wrinkle the sheets again. Mr. jOe


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    September 16, 2006
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    beautifully penned, this is a very soft and sensual write. I particularly enjoyed the following lines:

    Of toffee colours that sigh,
    Across the opaque white
    Of your marshmallow flesh.

    very enjoyable, thanks for offering it.
    Rory


  • dutch2lips gold member
    September 16, 2006
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    a sis, so sensual and a seductive write, hmmm, makes one feel warm in places


  • Shadows of wolves
    September 16, 2006
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    Oh wow this had all the mystique and mystery of a classic romance. It gave images of not only a real lover held in your arms , but also one of a phantom caressing your mind. Hauntingly beautiful, it definately is on par with the presentation of the kiss.

    Well writ

    shadows

  • Bad Bill
    September 16, 2006
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    Great

    A beautiful and deliciously sensual feast of words and images, sarajane--smooth as Jersey cream!

    Cheers
    Bill


  • Floorboards
    September 16, 2006
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    aw this is absolutely wonderful! i could hear mesel saying the words! , very very impressive (if a little tricky for me to read)
    well done dear poet!
    alex


  • individuality gold member
    September 16, 2006
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    it is a beautiful poem though i just am sat here wondering why you have ommitted the u from colour as you are from the uk spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

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