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*A Missing Puzzle Piece*

There is an energy beyond the stars

where brilliant beauty seeks

the slightest hope for long lost souls

where evil power reeks


For the darkness cannot reach

to the heavens as light can

it comes to shine it's truth on us

through each and every man


One by one and gathering

the innocent from shame

some learning lessons slow and hard

but learning, just the same


To capture heavens light

is to look not to the skies

it is through each and all our hearts

where peace and freedom lies


The universe is rising

and we all are a part

the windows of the soul are eyes

love shines through them from the heart


Though many hearts lie broken

and many windows have been  blind

so let your heart be open

what you give is what you'll find


When we each can look within

we will see we all are one

and without everyone we can't complete

our journey with the Son~(Sun)


So when you don't feel special

and you've lost your golden fleece

imagine the universe is a jig saw puzzle

and you are a missing piece.

 

Written By Debbera Neilson~

~1989~

Author notes

This ia poem that is a message of how important each and every one of us are to the creater. I put both the Son & (Sun) there so it would apply to all Religions or spiritual beliefs.

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    Good rhyme

    Very thoughtful and thought provoking.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 10, 2008

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    Excellent write great floe and rhyme congrats on the bronze
    Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest.
    I wish you the best of luck.

    RedwingSpirit


  • AmazinJason
    October 17, 2007
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    I love this poem...absolutely


    • Twinstar
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you so much for the nice comment on my poem, and for taking the time to read it.
      Love & Light
      Debbera


  • heygoo
    September 5, 2007

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    I especially like the third stanza. I love your message that each and every soul is as important as the next. Nice job with this.

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    May 5, 2007

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    A beautiful write with nice rhyme, flow and figures of speech. Well done.

    s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

    Note: Due to high volume of entries, I'll be using a scoring system to judge after the contest closes.


  • Dark Whispers
    April 29, 2007

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    the imagrey of this poem was great ,and I love the message, Im partiacal to all poems about God. great job


  • Vagabond
    April 5, 2007
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    Great work, thanks for entering... The rhyme and flow of this piece is very well concieved and maintained throughout, and the story that you tell here a very good and inspiring one. Thanks for sharing this great write, and best of luck in my contest!


  • Akimbo
    March 24, 2007
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    excellent

    really nice rhythym, rhyme and flow. I hear your words and appreciate the intent.
    Well done, Kj


  • Tam
    October 29, 2006
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    Oh My Goodness!
    Let me begin with: I love the background here. Usually I don't like much of a background, just solid colors, you know? But this is simply stunning! I LOVE IT!!!
    The poem is wonderful. You clearly have a gift and I'm so happy I had the opportunity to read your words.
    I will be going to bed soon with a happy heart!
    Thank you...
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Outstanding!

    WOW! I love this poem, it's so beautifully written, and with gorgeous visuals!!


  • Lionslove silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    simplicity can be the power!


    Well done! The flow was quite strong...almost flawless, with the tiniest of undulations in metre,...nonetheless, flow held.

    I found this piece to have a "clean" feel to eat..uncluttered by verbosity, real, and straight-ahead. I was engaged - and therein lies the real center of the target for any artist and any art. To achieve that is beauty, power, impact and strength.

    The clarity of this piece was unsurpassed ...and wonderfully refreshing. In so much poetry,...a thousand complicated metaphors and "words to impress"...when simplicity would have expressed!

    Thankyou for sharing this wonderful piece with us!

    All the best...........................Lionslove


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Excellent...

    A beautiful sincere write with a deep and lovely message to which you have put a lot of thought into...It says so much to me in that... Through darkest hours of our heart God will always shine a light, and that we should do the same with each other... I suppose everyone that reads this will see something different, a different meaning to them...

    A very good strong 1st stanza and I particularly like stanza 4

    A most enjoyable read... love the background to this piece too... I can't find anything to critique

    Love and smiles to you
    ~Lilac


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Beautifully written, a very calming style you have there, but I flet your passion about life also. Excellent rhyming too.
    Great work
    Gaylene


  • TripleGoddess
    October 28, 2006
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    This is beautiful. I really like it, and I can't think of anything wrong. Your background image is really nice, too, but it was a little hard for me to read the color over it. Great job.
    Blessings, Skye.


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 28, 2006
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    What a great background you have chosen for this poem - Lovely flow and message to this piece - we are all important, and if one is out, it's like a piece of the puzzle is missing and the picture is not complete.


  • Sharcu silver member
    October 28, 2006
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    Lovely job! Just a couple thoughts for you: Have you considered centering your poetry? I almost always do that and find that it looks better that way. May want to try that out. I liked how you made a spiritual poem without being over preachy or anything like that. Creative title and I liked how the background fits. Awesome job! Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • Ragan
    October 28, 2006
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    Wow, I lvoe it. I love the background, too.


  • perdisbeaute
    October 28, 2006
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    cool, it's kind of mystical. And i really liked the title too.
    Great write!

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    October 28, 2006
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    I really like this, is a very unique write. Was so easy to read and that makes enjoyment so much more.
    Thank you for sharing this with us, was a priviledge to read!
    Hugs, Suzi


  • LittleAnn
    October 28, 2006
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    A very good poem, the rhyming and flow were great and I liked the message you got across.
    Keep it up!
    *~Annie~*


  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 27, 2006
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    You're very welcome Debbera. It was a pleasure to read. Take care and God bless. Shelley

  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 27, 2006
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    Hi twinstar. Unique title. A lovely write, message and presentation. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Very good expression of emotion. Very nice metaphor. Strong alliteration. An uplifting piece. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley


  • merlin2high
    October 14, 2006
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    Nice poem I like that everyone is an important piece to the puzzle whether we are in our desired location or still looking to fit into our place

  • Francis Vincent
    October 14, 2006
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    very good

    a really excetional piece
    to be one with the stars, moon, etc


  • Avalin
    October 14, 2006
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    Wow this is a beautiful, well thought out and well written piece. The message of hope here is so strong. I'll deffently come back to this and read it again when I'm feeling low which happens a lot.

    "So when you don't feel special
    and you've lost your golden fleece
    imagine the universe is a jig saw puzzle
    and you are a missing piece."

    Excellent ending, such an amazing thought. Thanks for posting this, much enjoyed!

    ~Avalin~


  • Talking Toni gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    Great jiob

    Very deep but very true Great job!!!!!!!


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    Wonderful piece filled with emotion. Nice rhythm and flow. Loved the form and the thoughts. great work. Keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny


  • BittersweetPhantasm
    October 13, 2006
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    wow, this is such a beautiful poem. it's really touching and made me want to cry. it's true you have to believe you're important - the missing jigsaw piece.

  • grannyeri gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    Liked the rhythm and rhyme of this piece - flowed well and gave a good message - thought the missing puzzle piece fit right in! LOL


  • Bullet To The Head
    September 30, 2006
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    wow liked it!!
    "Though many hearts have been broken

    and many windows have been blind

    if you read these words I've spoken

    what you give is what you'll find"

    i love that stanza!!!
    the rhyming was perfect and the words haunting.
    this is quite a write you have here.
    i enjoyed reading this piece.
    thanks for sharing this with me and taking your time to read my poetry
    i appriciate your comment.

    take care and keep writing,
    ♥ lynn


  • Sgt B
    September 27, 2006
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    What a very special ending to this work of yours well done my friend Well done! .

  • grannyeri gold member
    September 15, 2006
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    Thought this poem flowed well and had good rhyme - we are all worth something, and like a pizzle, each piece contributes and if missing, the puzzle is not completed.


  • PoeticSpirit79
    September 15, 2006
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    Brilliant!! I loved it from beginning to end here.. i loved the vision that you portray here... as i always say keep writing, as you never know who will come across these talented words!!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    September 15, 2006
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    The entire concept of this piece was awesome. We do sometimes forget our worth. This was so positive and uplifting. Enjoyable read.
    Soulful Woman


  • CBminstrel
    September 15, 2006
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    An interesting poem. I was rather...torn on my response to it. In one sense I found it rather preechy for lack of a better word, and I'm not keen on that, especially when it involves religion, however on the other hand, it's very well written, flows well, the language is expressive and pretty, in parts beautiful and the ending stanza holds a positive message, and not the sharper one of the stanza before. So yes...I'm rather torn on this LOL Not sure about some of the message, but enjoyed it as a poem in it's own write, was very well written and closed with a more positive message. All just personal views though :-)


  • victoria Secret
    September 15, 2006
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    HA! Awomse. This piece was a wow for me. If I had to rate it 1-10, ten being the highest, darling you'd recieve a 20 This piece was very good. My first piece I've read since today, since this whole week, and I sure am glad I got to read something this good in a long time. Love the ending. Loved it all. You simply shine through your piece. Excellent job. Bless u.

    victoria

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