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The Hero.

Starry night,
Gunfire bright
the dogs of war came forth to fight.

Great heroes they were. O'er hilltop and moor,
The warriors who never took flight.

now the battle be done, the bodies piled high.
The wounded and dying their souls soon to fly.
one soldier remains, his head held up high.
the man who looked death in the eye.

Author notes

my first public poetry...all previouos poems I have ever written were under duress in school... go figure.
Written September 15th, 2006

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  • Sharcu silver member
    September 15, 2006
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    Wow! You have a lot of talent and I am glad you are finally sharing it with us (the public). Nice rhyming pattern... pretty short poem, but amazingly well written. Keep it up!

    Welcome to AllPoetry!
    --Tim


  • darkspiritonline
    September 15, 2006
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    ^_^

    Nice poem....^_^ Sweet!!!
    Liking these lines: one soldier remains, his head held up high.
    the man who looked death in the eye.
    Edited on Sep 15, 2:41 p.m. because 'I'm crap at spelling. lol'.