(9/14/06: piano, acoustic guitar & strings)
(verse one)
Out of obscurity I saw your light appear
With the voice of an undulating breeze;
Discord dissipating as you come near,
Parting me from the shackles of destiny
For all of my years I sought to walk away
From shadows clouding a bleak past;
Eternity passed, and I knew I'd rue the day
I allowed these chains to hold me fast...
(pre-choral bridge)
I sent to heaven a feeble whisper,
Implored with enough tears to fill a river
The angels above--could they not have known?
But here you are, love's very own
(chorus)
Set the skies on fire,
My wayward dove
Soar even higher,
My wayward dove
Don't ever tire,
My wayward dove...
You're my gift from above
On tides of desire,
My wayward dove
Defeat the liars,
My wayward dove
Above quagmires,
My wayward dove...
Fill me with your love
(verse two)
Into the vortex of tumults I'd roam,
Where naught around me remained staid
With argentine wings you dispelled the gloam...
You taught my spirit how not to be afraid
Adversaries of old torture me no more
Since I felt your presence on that day;
A power within me unlike that found before
Guides and protects me along the way
(pre-choral bridge)
(chorus)
(bridge)
Wherever I may go,
I know you'll always hear me
There's no room for despair
In this spirit that's broken free
From the shadows of herself
Seeking to enslave my very soul...
Its grip never again to gain control
(chorus)
Author notes
(a couple definitions, in case you don't follow)
gloam: twilight
argentine: silver
staid: fixed, permanent
quagmire: a predicament
implore: to ask
undulating: gently rolling
a song about hope, something that's still partially missing from my life. I haven't written a song in so long, and if it seems overblown or too 'forced'? your problem, not mine.
Written September 14th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Write me a world, write me a rhyme, write me a tale of yours and mine. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
400 points, ended December 19, 2006, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I actually think this is a very beautiful write and for some reason it brought a tear to my eye, I don't have a clue why! But that's a beautiful poem though and I am the same, I find it hard to find hope in this life that I live, but it's great when something good happens to give you temporary hope and security. Thanks for entering and good luck! x
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i do not know how this would be sung but i can imagine it being sung in a quiet but powerful tone, raspy words roaming the air. perhaps cohen-like.
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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execellent piece
Be strong my little one, love will surely take hold of you and keep you in it's firm embrace. I know it will. Love is always in the air and you too will soon float in it's breeze. I just love this and am happy to read something "HAPPY and HOPEFUL" from you. Don't forget that together we will fight the blues.
Your Loving Mother~ Cuddles -
Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Raven, I feel like I'm hovering with the doves after reading this song that is filled with more hope than I would need to last a lifetime. Your verbiage so profound carries your message clearly to me. I like how you put some definitions in your author comments for those who may be a little unsure. I usually find that you can grasp the meaning of a word by the context in which it is used. Then if I am still not sure 100% I will look it up to satisfy myself. In most cases I will find that I had the correct thoughts. This was fantastic and I say kudos to you for this wonderful song that you just shared with all of us. It has been far too long since I have enjoyed your elegant work and I need to come by more. I will try to do that so I won't miss the brilliance I see in all of your writing.
You were given a gift from God and I am never disappointed with anything I read by you. Best wishes in the contest and you get a standing ovation from me to go along with my applause. Love and blessings for you my dear sweet friend, today and always.
Joyce
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"Set the skies on fire,
My wayward dove
Soar even higher,
My wayward dove
Don't ever tire,
My wayward dove...
You're my gift from above
On tides of desire,
My wayward dove
Defeat the liars,
My wayward dove
Above quagmires,
My wayward dove...
Fill me with your love"
Definitely the best part of the song. Ahh I LOVE the chorus. the only things I would change are the big words. Lyrics are more about simplicity than painting a wonderful image, which your words definitely do. Not that images are bad... imagery is incredibly important to poetry.
I also love the last bridge...
"Wherever I may go,
I know you'll always hear me
There's no room for despair
In this spirit that's broken free
From the shadows of herself
Seeking to enslave my very soul...
Its grip never again to gain control"
... and your feeling of hope is definitely there. May I add that some of my favorite songs that I've written started off with just the chorus or just a bridge, so this still could become a great song. I'm assuming that since you specified "lyric version" that you have a poem of the same theme... I definitely want to read that now. Thank you so much for entering and good luck
pixie
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