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all it takes is

Have we planned this out?

all it takes is
just
one borrowed second.

in this-
bluebirds from shotguns,
we can't seem to organize our thoughts.

Comparison it-
it climbs up and eats my hand off
the remote.

I see so much static
now,
you're standing in the hail, boy.

you're standing in the way.

So who does this make better?
I never got to read the rest.

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Written September 14th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Cat
    September 24, 2006
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    this piece is disturbing- leaves the reader open to interpretation which is a good thing in poetry-

    thank you so much for entering the contest.
    m