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Gentleman Killer

Ahhhhh YEEEEES,

that's what I love, the hopelessness.

When they realize, they are NOT going to survive.

There's a moment, when death takes the eyes

Snuffing out the infernal light of hope.

That's why I choose so carefully.

They must be extraordinarily ALIVE.

I want them to FIGHT to live,

to draw breath one more time.

It does nothing for me to snuff

what is not loved, hopeless fucks

who welcome the end

they see in my face.

Mother-fucking cheats.

I rip them to shreds.

The fucking nerve,

not giving me my money's worth.

So I've learned.

Become a Connoisseur.

Of course that takes time.

You would not believe the lengths

to which despair will go to hide it's face.

Nope, I can wait,

you gotta get to know a person.

See if they're the ONE.

Heh, heh, excuse me,

I should say the NEXT one.

I gotta admit, I'm a bit of a glutton.

You know how it is, when you get a taste

of something reaaalllyyy gooooood.

Gobble, Gobble...make a pig of yourself, eh?

Now this ONE, I'm working on, this one SHINES.

A fuckin FLOOD light, she GLOWS with ALIVE.

Guards herself like freakin' Fort Knox.

Won't allow a risk on a whim for nothin'.

I've tried a dozen times to get her alone.

She says she's hard to get to know...

Let me tell you, she's so self-possessed

A new star in the Joffre Ballet,

poetry in the flesh.

Soars through the air like she can FLY.

I can hardly wait to knock this little bird out of the sky.

I never thought I'd indulge my little sport

So close to home,

I'm the silver-spoon born sort of course.

My parents spoiled me.

I mean they REALLY spoiled me.

Gave me every single fuckin god-damned thing I ever wanted.

The fuckin SNAKE, and the god-damned CUNT.

Leaving nothing, not a god damned novel thing

to do for fun, that I haven't already done.

Yeah, I blame my craven indulgences on my childhood.

It was too god-damned good.

Ahhhh, there's the rush, the little flutters in the gut.

You see, she finally agreed.

The Dancer that is.

Tonight is our first date.

I've promised to be completely discreet.

She doesn't want ANY one to know her private life.

Heh, heh. I assured her I don't kiss and tell.

Didn't mention, I don't kill and tell either.

I have a reputation to uphold, you know.




Author notes

I usually write from a male perspective when I am portraying a homicidal maniac. A female perspective for this particular character type just isn't as chilling....We women are scarier sometimes, but in a different persona. Anyway, just wanted everybody to know, I'm a chick! Just kind of a sick-chick! Heh!...

I read the rules.
Written September 14th, 2006

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  • soulfultia gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    Whew!! this was a dip in the dark pool!! I think it is great that your homicidal maniacs are males...being in law enforcement...I can tell you most of them are! This was an incredible write...I will have to bookmark this for another read!!! I bookmarked another too, one of those where you are sure you better read just one more time to soak it all in he he! my pleasure! ~Tia


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    November 9, 2006
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    Chilling/Dark/Twisted?But I Love It!

    Wow, see you can write as someone else in a twisted sense, wish I could do this as well, I too thought you were male, maybe because people don't necessarily think women can write about this kind of thing, which is honestly stereotypical, so 1 I owe you an apology for that, 2 this piece was amazing and absolutely chilling, gave me shivers, becasue honestly there really are guys like that out there in the world, I think too often people try to hide it...great job, loved the way you took it to the piece...you went all out and you scored big, great job, very chillingly descriptive, thanks for sharing it! keep it up! You def. have talent in heaps!



    ~Terri Anna~


  • Heartofacircle
    October 8, 2006
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    very powerful write and well writen, not an easy one at that, you worked it out though, and for that, thankyou for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry...


  • Frodofan silver member
    October 8, 2006
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    Maniac is right. This thing is warped and freaky. A sort of preppy bad guy... much scarier than anything else is my oppinion.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    October 7, 2006
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    Definitely a splendid treat,
    Must've been, quite a damn feat.
    Completed with style and finesse,
    You've made my mind a complete mess

    i think i can't say any more


  • Allure of a Rose
    September 20, 2006
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    Haha, I loved it! The background you used was perfect. Course, I'd have liked to see you torture the poor girl, but I suppose I'll have to learn of that event at another time, another place. Lol. Great job, as is quickly becoming the norm.

    -Allura

    Definitely a splendid treat,
    Must've been, quite a damn feat.
    Completed with style and finesse,
    You've made my mind a complete mess.


  • momiloco
    September 16, 2006
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    great write

    definite jack the ripper sort of piece. dark and horrific. great write. vivid imagery for sure


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    September 16, 2006
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    Thanks so much! Happy to please, with a break from the bunny, puppydog cheese!
    DK


  • Odd Thomas
    September 15, 2006
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    Finally, a break in reading all the happy children and balloons poems. I wanted horror, and you gave it to me with this very clever story. Very good. I see there was cursing in it and you didnt go overboard with it, which is very good, no typos. Excellent job.

    Anthony


  • OceanicEyes
    September 14, 2006
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    UGH...my applauses are sticking to this chics

    Again, and again, and again I have to give it up for you. You are gonna steal all my fuggin applauses!!!!!
    It's so damn refreshing to see this kind of writing being done, and not in an immature way. You put forth thoughts of murder and brutality with such genuine 1st person adherence, that it just makes me think after you write shit like this you go out and actually DO IT. I know you don't tho, or at least I think I think I know you don't...
    lmao...again BRA
    FREAKin
    VO.

    You got talent coming out of your ass.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 14, 2006
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    mean

    Im sorry I know it poetry but it makes me feel too uncomfortable . When there are more loveing things to write about. You have great form for poetry and I think you could do better on a teen sight .


  • James L Williams
    September 14, 2006
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    Great Write

    Awesome write. I loved this write. You really have a talent for these types of writes. Great Job.

    Luke


  • Lady Eventide
    September 14, 2006
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    Well...this is psychotic...and I did think that you were a guy. Great work you have here. Scared the you-know-what out of me. Good luck in the contest.

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