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Laid to rest

The man who burned the bricks,

to build his little church,

also built a family home,

by the creek down in the birch.

 

Taught his family every week

with sermons full of praise.

teaching them their values

by showing them his ways.


Calloused hands worked the clay,

to build a better life,

but there came a frigid winter

and that year he lost his wife.

 

The family was in mourning

from the loss that came their way,

laying mother in the earth,

by the church, on Christmas day.


But he never stopped believing,

in his faith that was so real,

giving thanks for each new day,

saying grace at every meal.

 

Growing old while burning bricks,

he stayed there by the creek,

gazing at aged photographs

as tears stream down his cheek.


He dreamt of his loving wife,

this helped to soothe his scars.

He always held her tenderly,

as they danced among the stars.

 

Memories of his children

how they’d grown before his eyes,

yet one by one they left him too,

meeting mother in the skies.


Old bible pages worn from age;

tear stained on faded ink,

he read the Word on every night,

this helped him stay in sync.

 

His soul was like a beacon,

lighting up the darkest nights,

never straying from his path,

while rising to new heights.


I just can’t help but wonder,

why he stayed there all those years.

Was it because of his little church,

or of all his saddened tears?

 

Wrinkled man with weathered hands

that prayed upon his knees,

praising God for everything,

did this man hold heavens keys?


The story goes, at ninety one,

when they laid him in the ground.

Lightening clashed; thunder roared

a poignant awesome sound.

 

And when the storm had ended,

they saw carved into his stone,

“Through all his life this preacher man,

had knelt before my throne”.

 

 

 

 


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I don't have a link nor the artists name for this painting. If anyone knows please let me know so I can credit them
Written September 14th, 2006

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  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 5, 2007

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    An awesome tale tale well penned, dear poet! For the most part this flowed wonderfully with only a few rough spots easily repaired, should you so choose. A place or two needs technical repair, but none of it detracts from a powerful tale excellently written. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *

    YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED ; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits


  • Vagabond
    January 26, 2007
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    Good work on this poem! The flow and rhythm are terrific, and the story is an interesting one. There were a few places where the beat seemed just a little bit rocky, but for the most part it was flawless. Good work, and thanks for entering my contest.

  • FifthDove
    October 7, 2006
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    Thank you...


  • Carpe Noctem
    October 7, 2006
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    amazing

    This was beautiful. I loved it. So well-written and such a heartfelt story. Fantastic job!!!

  • FifthDove
    September 28, 2006
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    Thank you


  • Cupcrazy
    September 28, 2006
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    Beautifully written Dove and exactly along the lines I was thinking of history with a story, great write with wonderful rhythm and rhyme! Bunny


  • sunshineNjanuary
    September 16, 2006
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    This is like a mini book. Wonderful


  • Smirnoff Ice
    September 15, 2006
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    An excellent piece which left me wishing it was longer.a great piece.fantastic flow


  • Huntress silver member
    September 15, 2006
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    This is an excellent poem. I want a great big thunderstorm when i croak so i can give my family one last rumble

  • FifthDove
    September 14, 2006
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    Thank you very much

  • FifthDove
    September 14, 2006
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    Thank you


  • Glenda L Hand
    September 14, 2006
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    You go girl!

    OH my gosh! This is amazing!!!! And I mean this. One suggestion. Change the font so the lines end correctly. Amazing. simply amazing. Glenda


  • Abdul T Alishtari
    September 14, 2006
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    I have been away so long, you may not remember, this journeyor, who has come along but this is excetptional and I recognize its feelings true.

    AT

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