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The Girl Who Came To Dinner

The girl who came to dinner
She brought with her,her closest friends
Tommy,who said little but meant much
And Connie who craved nothing but warm human touch

Tongue-in-cheek Michael was already there
As always ageing Helen looked square
Oh the glaring remember-me-always eyes of Clive
You could cut the arrogance in the air with a bread knife

"Life is much too important too ever talk seriously about"
"To become a spectator of life is to escape it's suffering"
"The world is a stage,but the play is badly cast"
Serious words are so cheerfuly thrown

The girl who came to dinner
Got to talking with Tommy whom she admired so
She knew so little of love and she wanted to know
"Do you believe in love at all?"

"No, my girl nine times out of ten, no
It is merely one of our ages many performances
Like some half-witted boy dancing,fucking little party girls"
"Then what do you believe in?"

"I believe in having a good heart,
A chirpy penis,
A lively intelligence,
And the courage to say 'shit' in front of a lady"

"Well you;ve got them all Tommy" shouted Michael
Tommy roared with laughter and said "No no my heart is as numb as a potato
My penis droops and never looks up
And I'd rather cut him off before I say 'shit' to anyone
And I'm not really that intelligent mind you"
The girl who came to dinner
All through the night she was never shy and seldom intimidating
She was in the blossom of youth for which life never really prepared her for
But she felt she had grown when she said her goodbyes

"Life leaves you by the wayside nearly all of everyday and night
Then it comes crashing in on you at once
There is nothing we can be sure about
So close your eyes and go to bed"

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Written September 14th, 2006

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  • AceOSpades
    April 25, 2007

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    heh I like the characters here ... and quite a few of the lines. You completely abandoned any attempt at rhyming a couple lines in though. It's particularly hard to rhyme dialog, but yeah I would have preferred some kind of consistent scheme... or rhyming at all in the second half. I like the characters though... and the belief in "the courage to say 'shit' in front of a lady" made me laugh. I think you could rework this piece a bit and make it stronger from a structural standpoint, but I rather like the content in it... quite different from what I'm used to seeing.


  • Teddibly Abnormal
    September 23, 2006
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    haha i like it. i really like it.


  • ChicaBoo
    September 14, 2006
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    wow this was good!!! i really really liked it!! great job!! thank you for entering this in my contest!!

    love,
    --chicaboo