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Broken Cliches

Their whispers echo in my mind

As I’m throwing gasoline over my wretched self

 

“She’s killing him.”

“Well, I heard she’s transforming him into one of those stupid clichés.”

“Look at him; she broke him.”

‘Yeah, you can see it in his eyes.”

 

You were once this drugged up angel

Only slightly tinted with ashes;

Ashes that coated your pretty wings

That kept you drowning in the atmosphere

 

“She suffocated him with labels.”

“He’s dead now. And have you heard? She murdered him.”

“Really? Oh but he was so damn beautiful…”

 

So damned perfect

But I tainted you

Loved you

Fucked you

Hated you

 

“She didn’t want him to know she was worthless.”

“He believed she was something.”

                         Everything.

Author notes

Baby, you're trying so hard to overcome those cliches
and you're ignoring the fact that you've become a label
just like them.
Written September 13th, 2006

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  • Bittie
    May 22, 2007

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    ....wow. this is beautiful.. it makes me think of someone I know.

    thanks for writing it. I love it. you're going on my favorites.

    add more stuff soon. I like it.


  • makeout kid
    October 6, 2006
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    wow. i know pretty much all my comments say pretty much the same thing...but girl, your poetry leaves me speechless. honestly. you are an incredible writer.


  • Dead Star--x
    September 19, 2006
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    i dont know what to make of this, but i really like it, it all the words i can come up with this late night, the poem is simply, pretty... awesome write!
    Abused


  • xXbroken lullabyXx
    September 19, 2006
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    wow..i love this...especially the last stanza..it was beautiful..but great job and keep it up!


  • xFirexAtxWillx
    September 17, 2006
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    PRETTY

    ACK!
    This is so pretty!
    so pretty <3
    I love it.
    The people/whatevertheyare give it a beautiful touch
    I'm just all assfdfhkhfg about it.
    SO PRETTY!


  • -MrsWonka-
    September 15, 2006
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    wow this is amazing. good topic to write about, cliches are so over used.


  • bird-mad girl
    September 13, 2006
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    amazing.

    Your imagery was so vivid
    and stunning that it just blew me away.

    You have no idea how powerful this piece was.

    I loved everything about.
    The form and how you constructed everything.
    This was just flawless.
    It was amazing.
    I'm just speechless right now.

    You did a truely wonderful job on this.

    So far, this is the best I've read by it.

    It was just...
    I don't even know what to say.

    Perfect.

    always && forever,
    ~Kendal

  • blue bubble gum
    September 13, 2006
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    Woah, this is definitely a change in poetry style, which I absolutely love! It's really strong, powerful. Keep it up damnit!

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