underground station
train leaves passengers stranded
faraway echoes
Author notes
senryu
Written September 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Calling ........ Haiku, Haiku, Haiku by Seeking Peace.
450 points, ended January 20, 2007, 58 entries
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Sweet sounding senryu dude.
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Wonderful Haiku, very descriptive, lovely to see someone write about something unique, great job
Thankyou for entering this contest, I wish you the ver best of luck
Karen -
Great
I feel for those people stranded. We have buses for our public transportation. Sometimes they do pass us up though. I bet there were some heated comments in the "echoes" too. Peace. -
Cool, very simple, but got a clear image and feeling to the piece!
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Simple and brilliant.
Love it.
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very nice write Alex good luck in the contest my friend
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This is very beautiful,a feeling of desolation..yet simple.Good job.Keep up the good writting. goodluck in the contest.
Edited on Sep 13, 1:54 p.m. because 'forgot to add something'. -
You write so many poems and each one a gem. Again good luck in the contest
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