Hard marble
soft skin
soft lips
that grin
contrapasto
fall, Goliath
fall
down
like I fell
I fell at David's mercy
like you, Giant Goliath
but my David threw no stone
only pebbles at my bedroom window
when I fell
I fell in love
I fell the hardest of us two
friend giant
In death you have peace
but in love I have everything
you have slain me, my David
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Written September 12th, 2006
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ooohhhhhh i LOVVVE thissssss!!!!!!!
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oh wow..this is so simple..and so symbolic ..its nice..damn..reminds me of the time when i tried to play david..but my goliath never fell..ha ha..beautiful..keep it up..
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This is a really good poem, love the way you incorporated David and Goliath, into a modern setting, well done
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Nice poem
I love this poem. Great job in connecting the story of David and Goliath to a happy love story. I would have never thought it was possible to do that before reading your poem. Good job. -
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i love this poem! my dear late hubby was named david, and so is our soon to be 13 year old son. davids are great guys! this is a great poem!i pray that you are as happy with your david as i was with mine for 15 wonderful years. -
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Good connection and a strong message in few words. This is a strong piece with a romantic tone, good write! Thanks for sharing this piece
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