I see in the distance,
The light of safe harbor,
I follow the voice,
As it calls to me.
Endless the water,
That keeps her from me,
The moon in the distance,
Watches over me.
Visions and shadows,
I see high on the cliffs,
Guiding me home to,
Where my heart belongs.
She waits by the light,
That our hearts call home,
My love is waiting atop,
Moonlight Cove.
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Written September 12th, 2006
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Loved the picture. This poem is lovely. I could see her waiting.
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Thanks so much my friend for your encouraging words. I always try to place myself in these poems to help bring out the true feelings more easily.
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excellent
this is wonderful it has just the hint of of the real life i can see you standing there waiting for your brave to come to Moonlight Cove. Good Good -
Thanks again Pisces for your most wonderful comment. I am so glad this was able to touch you in some small way..
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WOW, another amazing picture and a beautiful and serene write. It compliments the picture perfectly but you also do a wonderful job of painting your own picture with your words. This is a very soft and loving piece!
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seen in the distance,The lights of safe harbours,I follow the voices,as it calls to us..endless the water,that keeps us apart, moon in the distance,watches over me..Visions and shadows,seen high on the cliffs.Guiding me home,to where my heart belongs..She waits by the lights,That our hearts call home.My love is waiting atop,moonlite cove....The best way to show you my suggestions was to add in little changes,hope this gives you a few ideas,best to sleep on it.I did not try to change it,only toy with it a bit trying to get rid of some me's and I's,I have a few other ideas but they start to unravel your words.rudolf
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Thanks rudolf for your comment. I took your advice and tried to look up some alternative words for I and Me but there are none. I even tried to change the sentance but still came back to the same words. I would any sugestions.
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Powerful picture
I like your poem,Paints a powerful image with very few words,because it doesn't have to many words the four me's and three I's jumped out at me.if you could fine tune that a bit I believe it would flow a little smoother transforming it from good to a great poem.I love the last stanza.I'm not saying you need to change it,just an observation.rudolf -
Thanks so much for your great comment. Too bad you were not judging the contest.
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Thanks Soulfultia I am so glad you enjoyed it. It was something new I was trying.
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Amazing
Just browsing saw the title intrieged me clicked on and saw that picture. My heart just stood still as memories flooded my mind of my early days on the Chesapeak Bay coming around 7ft nole and we saw the light house we knew we were aproaching Fort Howard and we would soon be home. Well enough of that your Poem was beautiful every line every verse just perfect and the Picture a perfect setting. Love that last Stanza it makes the poem and makes it great.
She waits by the light.
That our hearts call home,
My Love is waiting Atop,
Moonlight Cove.
Good Luck in the Contest. ( It's a winner in my Book.)
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wonderful
A short but wonderfully written poem which sends you on an imaginative journey,,,, I read this twice and both times it just flowed smoothly and had a calm feeling that just coursed through it... just loved the write, good work and good luck in the contest! Wonderful write. -
Thanks americanGirl I am so glad you liked it, and thanks for the luck.
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That was really great. I absolutely loved it. Great work, really well written. Keep up the writing. Good luck in the contest. God Bless!
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Thanks again Kari I'm glad you liked it. I will continue to try new things until I feel compfortable with one.
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Thanks Marmalade that seems to be a favorite part for me also .
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Thanks rocker I'm glad you liked it. This was a little different for me.
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Awesome
This was so deep and real. You can really write in all kinds of forms
I love it. The best of luck to you in the contest!
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A wonderful poem, I like the fact that the moon is watching over and the last stanza is superb, thank you for entering
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Good!
Wonderful write!
It goes very well with the picture that you've chosen.
"She waits by the light,
That our hearts call home,
My love is waiting atop,
Moonlight Cove."
I really like that particular stanza.
I think it's very special
Good luck in the contest!
I know you'll do well in it.
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker who lost all aka Sacred Shadows
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