Tarnished streams no longer clear,
fated angels now abandoned here.
Silver wings fouled of sullied pride,
dusty in wanton ash can no longer fly.
Pride hath cometh before the fall,
a soiled soul must now learn to crawl.
Before it's ascent on unstable legs,
stand firm stalwart in humility traits.
In the darkened pools of reflective past,
a glimmer of hope still shines at last.
Penance payment for broken rules,
in a land between heaven and ghouls.
Purgatory lament of Earth bound souls,
not unlike so many this world has known.
~~Suseann~~
9/12/2006
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Written September 12th, 2006
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This carries a haunting sadness that is so seductive that it makes me curl my toes and tears come to my eyes. I could probably go on and on about the emotions this conjures within me, but I'll spare you. Masterful work here! Awesome!
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ahh susie......this very beautiful......being a naughty angel.....yes fallen.....a place to find yourself and find encouragement to lifting themself above the grief and forsaken.... is there a purgatory for angels as well as humans....I must say this is a very creative and well penned writing.........a twist to the norm......sad and dark tought I see a light for this forsaken winged angel......just as I see a light shine on you girl....love this to pieces.....excellent write....
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Amazing, beguiling and wonderous.
Would give you two appluses if I could. Tou continue togrow and amaze Suse,hugs with my heart Ann -
I think we are all earth bound souls hoping to be shown the path to heaven.I loved your write.Dark but very beautiful.Very well done, Ros
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SO VERY BEAUTIFUL!
This is so beautiful Suseann, I have read several who wrote in this contest, so many who did are my favorite list.
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I agree with me belle as I too was picturing fallen angels with this write. I like the story Loved the rhyme, Good luck. ~Ron~
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This is a beautiful depiction of 'fallen angels' with presentation. Very beautifully penned and rhymed. Best of luck to you, dear poet. Belle
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Fear of the unknown attracts them I think. At least I'd hope that's all young sociaty is about. Thanks for reading.
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So true of the angels who have fallen. Pride has alot of evil witin it. Ego torments and tortures souls. Luring them into an abyss of, hopeless, endless nightmare. Kids, today want to be associated with fallen angels and dark things, however, they do not know what the consequences will bring. Love is so easily turned into hate from jealousy or fear. Rather better to concentrate on the positive until the negative seeds reveal themselves, then get rid of the little buggers
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Well at least someone understands it. I've asked a couple of friends who didn't.And worried it might of missed the mark in message. So thanks for the vindacation.
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falling from grace
Dark and picturesque, how sin here is portrayed through wonderful imagery, from the fallen to the awakening of
truth..written alegorically,a subtil message of falling from grace. Foxy weave. -
This is very interesting. It really is. Thanks for posting this. Good luck in the contest. God Bless!
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