A Weeping in the Jolly Autumn
And I feel, Of this
A wonder
Found at last
Leaving these
Marks of fear
I dreamt a song
Awake, awake, my love
My love for you inside of me
Silent sleep
No longer
An angel is a heaven
Lost in my heart
My face I was wet with their distress
No longer
Haunting
Me
Selfishly
I bare my soul to you
This hearts love bares the bard
Blossoms grow
No longer hearing
The cry of Dreams
The villain of pain has not broke this soul
To the sunny beams
Is where i find you
This Tree
I carve your name
As in my heart
Bless the selfless loves in my pretty robin's heart
As we fall in love another day
The mellowing year ends.
Steven Mels
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Written September 12th, 2006
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Outstanding
I was very impressed with the flow and ingenuity you have with imagery in this poem which I thought was exceptional. You have a real ability with unusual and unexpected imagery. I very much enjoyed reading this poem which was outstanding -
Hi, a bitter sweet poem of longing, This would do well in a comp if you could find an honest one, one can feel the yearning in this poem, all the best, Di
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Wow. :| I Initially Clicked On It In The "Featured" Box Because It Contained The Word "Jolly".
But it made me smile. It is marvellous. I particularly liked these lines:
"This Tree
I carve your name
As in my heart."
I read the poem to my Mother- as I do when I especially like something- and she was it was 'dramatic' and 'gorgeous.' So, well done my friend for a beautiful composition.
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Amazing
This is beautiful. Simply beautiful. You have done a wonderful job with words and the rythem of the poem. It slips off you tongue like ice but is twice as delicious. Keep writing, you are amazing.
*~* Mad Hatter Felix -
Darling
I think of you
you show up there
like magic for who
is beautiful and fair.
Smoosh
Janet -
Very well done..
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such sorrow and pain from these words, but hope and determination shines forth from the last verse.
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Oh baby boy this makes my heart ache for you. It is good to see you writing again even if I still see pain in your words.Keep penning what's in your heart baby.
Mama Linda
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I always enjoy a poem from fall
Thank you for sharing this one with me
Love and Light your way
Frozentearz -
It's sad and happy at the same time. "Time heals all wounds" is a proverb we learned in class, but there's always a scar.
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A VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM MY FRIEND
Ah, a true love goes on throughout the year, the passing seasons seem to just help the love to be stronger.
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great
how wonderful to have such a long lasting relationship with someone. this is a great poem. -
AWESOME JOB!!!!! ENJOYED IT!!!!!
My dear sweet Son
How awesome to see you and read such wonderful words by you again.....
I have missed you very much and pray all is going well for you.....
This piece is somehwat sad, but it have a hint of hope hidden in between the lines.....
You deserve to get the best of love in this lifetime, and I pray it gets to you one day, and stays "forever"...
God bless you always, my Steven, I love you very much.....
MoM
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Steven!!!
Oh wow, my sweet friend! How good it is to read your words here once again! This piece was just awesome! I hope you've been alright and I hope your life has been filled with all things wonderful! Take care and all the best to you!
Sandy -
Well, I have missed these beautiful words of yours. Hope to see more of these from you soon. Hope you are well and the Good Lords blessings follow you wherever you go. I miss you, my friend. Love has amazing healing powers. Just one thing here, "The villain of pain has not broken (you said broke) my soul" is proper grammar. But still, beautiful loving words here.
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wow! this is so sad, but yet full of hope, I hope your love developes through strong vibes and force to be built on for years to come..keep penning and good luck..MM
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