Stymied voice rose,
indicating new spirit flows,
thorugh life's hose.
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indicating new spirit flows,
thorugh life's hose.
Written September 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- Three lines of wonder... x by Lavender Butterfly.
300 points, ended September 11, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Even when your hope is gone, move along by Barely Breathing.
450 points, ended June 21, 2008, 18 entries
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This is a lovey write and says so much for so few words. Well done and all the best in my contest.
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Quite similar style to mine, short and sweet, great contrast....
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Quite similar style to mine, short and sweet, great contrast....
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so true
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I have to admit that I don't feel that the flow of this piece is as good as it could be as particularly as it's about flowing it seems to me that it should be smoother.
When I read this it's almost as if it keeps getting caught up in places for example if the voice is stymied then it doesn't make sense for it to be rising and indicating anything. -
Such a thought provoking piece. Lovely flow! Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.
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