the smell of clover
oh my Love's bed of dreams
clouded memories
long ago into tomorrow
I am clinging to loss
for these wounds remind me
that I have loved
oh the smell of tears
rain evaporated pain
singing sorrow
because it is all over
myra
20 April, 2003
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Some words in a poem by mtpoet ripped open my sorrow ...
Written April 20th, 2003
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it may have been lost but the memory remains forevermore in the heart and in the mind, to flourish when we pour the thoughts over the experience.
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We love and we die and we grieve and we lament and we somehow go on. Your emotions run the gamut and so does this poem. Nicely done!
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"of the smell of tears" ~ That was my favorite line! So well said... this poem was a very amazingly written piece of poetry. Thank you so much for sharing. *Sonya*
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The imagery is very Rudy(mtpoet)...The author's note makes things clear though...
Poetry is a great away expressing feelings of melancholy as in the after effects of lost love! -
over and over again?
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Thank you, my friends, for reading and commenting
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Vivid and descriptive, your analogies are right on the mark, calling to mind the smell of rain and the feel that is left on ones cheeks as the salt of tears dries mingling them together as one seperated experience... and the time that passes between the sting of them and the memory of that which made them...
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Absoluutly wonderful and amazing!
Oh Myra!!!!! This is wonderful!
"oh the smell of tears
rain evaporated pain
singing sorrow
because it is all over"
Jeeze ya know I have felt these words! It's just amazing how you make the reader FEEL the words!
~Laura
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Fantastic
Hello Myra,
This is simply beautiful! Your words are vivid. This peice just flowed over me as I read. You use striking words that touch me. I especially love this..
long ago into tomorrow
I am clinging to loss
for these wounds remind me
that I have loved
Fantasic! Wonderful write my friend! Thank you so very much for sharing it with me
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Myra, every word in this piece speaks to me... the images and metaphors... clinging to loss to remind you that you have loved... that is so poignant...
rain evaporated pain ... makes me think of that feeling that you get, when you are all cried out, and your body is very tranquil, and all you can do is breath... it is somehow cathartic... -
memories can unlock the door for pleasant dreams
and sorrow told of forgotten days
we all have those days of memories....
thanks for sharing your heart Myra
Tamara
happy Easter
many blessings your way
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Excellent with emotion
Ps this really is a pened emotional write sweetie!! Excellent. -
Felt the loss of sadness in this Myra and the memories of one so dearly loved a tender write of love sweetie filled with the ache of compassion and sorrow through the longing for what was that now isn't but a memory to remain... Hugs,Sherry
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I like the ending well done
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Oh! memories found in clouded dreams
pleasing thoughts of happy themes
times of loving warm embrasses
swim in the eyes of lovers faces
now only seen in clouded dreams.
With a hundred words you create a thousand thoughts,
Myra, you always find a way of moving the heart through this cluttered world.
Andrew -
Thank you for inspiring me - unintentionally ...
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Es freue mich um Ihre Wörter zu lezen, Mtpoet .. . Your poems are great.
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Thank you for reading and commenting, TE - I know what you are saying ... because I also tend to "lock away"
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Thanks for visiting & sharing the "Einladung des Mitleids" observation--sicher, sehe ich dass jetzt... danke sehr.
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"oh the smell of tears
rain evaporated pain
singing sorrow
because it is all over"
i really love this, it's short and simple, but it says so much, and it's so sad, the end of a relationship is always hard, especially if you really loved the person, this poem just really touches me, and speaks to parts of me that i've kept locked away, good write
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