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Look Away, Love, Look Away

If in the moonlight you see my eyes,
Take a second and look away, love.

Petty time, ticking seconds
Wasted on staring at the silent waiting,
Perched on reason and headed towards uncertainty.

I lay in the dust facing the sky,
Looking up into the mirrors of the outside.
Waiting for my life to begin and end,
To clear out this rubbish once again.

My heart can't handle the pounding,
The beating -beating one and two and three
All over again, taking me, all over again
Like another faithful lie,
Something dishonest you can always depend on.

The seasons are spinning, and I'm waiting for a sign
To see when the leaves will change;
My heart will ache for those seconds back,
Where the light in the dark would shine.

With a smirk and sinister face, something we'd create
Forever and for a moment that's fleeting and gone.

When the leaves changed from dead to green,
All the things I thought I'd seen,
All the things I thought would be,
My heart will ache for the moment when I thought I'd stay sane
And you'd always whisper this name,
And when the leaves changed once again.

The sun is rolling down, love.
Look away.
You might see my eyes in the moonlight, love.
Look away.

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Written September 10th, 2006

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    January 16, 2007
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    Lots of imagery play in this and very descriptive. I would have liked to see more uniformity in the lines and it would be better if you considered breaking it up into stanzas. I think it would flow better.

    God Bless
    Tammy