dust
greys layers
dove white
shredded
bent
abandoned by the hours
hanging pinioned
and forgotten
from Babel's towers
wavering in the horizon
headless horsemen ride
kicking up ash from hell's fires
brandishing encrusted scythes
battle-scarred and stained
with life
sanctity once swallowed grace
bearing an angel's face
consumed by truth
swallowing bitter bits of gall
gagging on the lies
behind a caul
of broken wings
high above the Seraphim sing
below
a pall fractures brittle light
(according to the fall )
dark stains spread
forming endless night
where golems dream godless dreams
keening in octaves
human ears cannot not decipher
meanwhile
cherubim continued chanting timeless hallelujahs
souless golems do not matter
together Harut and Marut stand apart
separated from God's best
tainted by human sensuality
profaned by God's almighty's test
long ago they beeseeched God to forgive mankind's mortal sin
He set upon them instead
the bittersweet taste of human carnality
when he sent them to walked the earth as men
as always
Israfil asks eternal questions
patiently awaiting answers from un-animated lips
likewise Izra'il releases souls accordingly
all being as it was and always is
"I am!"
cries a voice
as cracked and desperate
as desert sands and unwashed feet
no room for desire
no room for despair
depleted
the soul displaces the very air
with need
weeping, Marut turns to Harut
"is the decent complete then?"
"no," Harut answers
tears raining upon earth
"it is without end"
Author notes
Written September 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Perfect Prewrites by Allyce May.
600 points, ended October 2, 2006, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angels [&&] The Afterlife by Death of the Author.
1200 points, ended May 19, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for entering my contest x take care and good luck x
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your write was very lovely in deed to read Goodluck to you
and creative writing is always a plus in any poetry :0 Pj's -
Beautiful! I am so glad you entered, I loved every minute of this poem!
"dove white layers
shredded
bent
abandoned
hanging pinioned
...and forgotten"
"headless horsemen ride
brandishing scythes
rusted
and stained
with life"
Those parts are so satisfying, such lovely imagery.
Thanks again for sharing and good luck!
xAx
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Great poem which I found very interesting and well written. Keep writing, I felt this was a very gripping, dark write. Good luck in the contest
All the best
Pozo
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Jess you were so right and I do appreciate honest critique. Thanks.
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Arw that's ok. I'm glad you didn't get angry lol! Most people do when i comment nowadays..
It looks loads better - sorry, I kinda jumped in quick lol
jess -
-ButterflyCuts- thanks so much, I had just posted it and was still editing...I agree with you and changed the caps....thanks for your imput and cool comment!
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A gorgeous write.. lovely images and description. I didn't like the every line caps though.
x
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