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Small, Red Flower



Standing alone as the world continues to move
Why continue to strive when there is nothing left to prove?
It has been several years since a smile has crossed my lips
How can I go on when my life is an eternal eclipse?

I’m a small, red flower in a world that’s otherwise colorless
But being color in a black and white world just causes distress;
Everyday is a struggle to step out the four walls of my house
To live in a colorless society that forces me to be a conforming mouse

This world has not always been completely colorless, you see;
It all started when we gave up our natural power to be free
Society pushed us to be like everyone else and conform
Transforming our lives into the lifelessness society’s set norm

This is why I am red while everything else is black and white
Even though I am persecuted for being different I delight
Will you be different and let the color shine from your soul?
Or will you let the societal conformity leave in you a hole?


by Sharcu (Tim)
 

Author notes

This poem was inspired from a line I found under "brainstorm". I didn't start it off meaning to be about conforming and society... you might be able to get that from the first stanza But it fit well and I thought it would be a good topic. This is partially personal with me trying to be different... but like most people, I too conform to certain things. I try not to, but it is hard.

Hope it made sense and that you enjoyed reading it
Written September 8th, 2006

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  • Lady-Pegasus
    February 14, 2007

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    You've Just Been Hood-Winked, courtesy of Poetic Bandits

    Very interesting, as I am one who is rainbow colored in this lack luster world of ours, with a goal to spread some of the beauty and light to others!! At times I have conformed, but usually for the sake of my children. Although even there, I have sometimes not conformed for them to learn the strength of being different and unique!! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Peg


  • Cupcrazy
    February 14, 2007
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    Beautifully written thoughts that hold such truth about society today. Lovely form and flow and the rhythm and rhyme are well done. Excellent write from start to finish. Bunny

    You have just been hoodwinked


  • looneyeclipse
    October 20, 2006
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    Well, as long as you conform like everyone else, and don't walk across the street when a Mac truck is barelling down it at 70 mph lol...

    A thought provoking write, and I agree, there is constant pressure to conform, brought about by power hungry politicians and governments. I found your poem to be interesting and the topic unique. Thanks for posting it, and good luck in the contrest.


  • jasminerose
    October 12, 2006
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    This was a wonderful thought provoking write! Your words leave the reader with much to think about as I know I do not conform to well so I can appreciate all it has to offer!
    Beautifully written, excellent rhyme!
    Thank you for entering our contest!
    Jasminerose

  • afireinthisheart
    October 11, 2006
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    it did make sense...for I would rather stand out myself than to be a clone to the world...you offered an invitation and an option..well written...this write's awesome and insightful...smile...David


  • poet2angels gold member
    October 11, 2006
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    Tim
    Your poem made such valid points and in such a poetic way!
    I have always been in love with rhyming when it is unforced and flows magically, and you have done that with this write. You were able to write a flawless rhyming poem while adding beautiful imagery and metaphor which is not easy!
    Great pick for an entry!

    These lines stood out to me:

    "This is why I am red while everything else is black and white
    Even though I am persecuted for being different I delight
    Will you be different and let the color shine from your soul?
    Or will you let the societal conformity leave in you a hole"

    Good luck in the competition!

    Lynda


  • requiempoet gold member
    September 22, 2006
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    qu

    While I think that the unique people try to be unique...they're not unique. They're trying to be like the rest of the different out cast loners, the ones that have been abused so they cut and the popular ones that have a successful parent or parents so they partied alot and were into heavy drugs. Nothing in a person is outstandingly unique.

  • XbrokenXforeverX
    September 17, 2006
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    wow. i hate beign like everyone else too. i like to be my own person.anyway, awesome poem. im off to read your others.


  • Maldronah
    September 16, 2006
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    If I felt that way (asssuming you do) I wouldn't write poetry.
    And, if you think that you are the only splash of color around
    you're looking inside, not outside.


  • September 12, 2006
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    A very good poem indeed!


  • daviscth silver member
    September 12, 2006
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    This write was simply awesome!


  • ThaliaLaughed
    September 12, 2006
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    Wow, you captured --in my opinion-- almost exactly how displacement and being out of place feels. Beutifully done.


  • Yorgo
    September 10, 2006
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    Simply a great poem portraying the naked truth ... a great job indeed! all the best for ur next piece !!
    Edited on Sep 10, 11:03 because 'spellin mistakes'.


  • LoveDroveMeCrazy4U
    September 9, 2006
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    wow this is very well written and i throughly enjoyed reading it. It related well to me personally. Excellent excellent poem. I don't know what else to say about it so i will leave it at that.
    LoveDroveMeCrazy4u


  • GoldenEssence
    September 9, 2006
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    Tim your mind is so beautiful. This really hit me and I relate like mad. You are so blessed through words.

  • gypsyfish
    September 9, 2006
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    EXCELLENT/THE SHIT

    oh man! there is SO, SO, many things i could say about this!!!like how i'm not a mouse, i'm a man, (even though i'm a girl), and how all i see is colors, (red is passionate, by the way!), and how there is ONLY 'black or white',(wrong or right, you know?), God there is so, so, so many things i could say... but i don't think i have to, i think you already know. and i'm sorry about that, ok? let's just leave it at that. i love you, and if you need somebody, i ain't much, but i'm always here. this is a very beautiful peice. this is some good writing. wish i would have wrote it. love GYPSY


  • WolfHeart
    September 9, 2006
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    excellent

    From a Red Flower, heartfelt BRAVO!! I paint myself red, galled at the idea of being like "everyone" else. The red flowers bloom the brightest and have the deepest and strongest roots. This is a magnificent write~

    hugs Wolfie

  • June-bug
    September 9, 2006
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    excellent

    Extremely well written piece, your words are fantastic, it is sad that society tries to put so much on what one should be instead of letting one be who they are. I agree with Soulful Woman, be true to yourself. yes there are certain things that we all must conform to but we can still be ourselves.

  • crystylheart
    September 9, 2006
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    Ah, yes, the age old cry for nonconformity! What I love so much about it is that however many times it is written, sung, or told, it is always relevant and always told with a different flare! I only have one critique: look back and reread it (outloud) some of the lines have differing beats and that sort of throws off the poem a bit. all in all, twas a wondrous work my friend!
    Crystylheart


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    September 9, 2006
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    Very powerful piece with a great message..Just be who you are..it is usually the easiest, because its the truth..Be well
    Soulful Woman


  • purple wings
    September 9, 2006
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    sounds like a colaberation to me,forgive me if i am wrong.great work though.


  • Cupcrazy
    September 9, 2006
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    Wonderful piece, loved the rhythm and rhyme. The flow was awesome as was the message. great work, keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny


  • Tam
    September 9, 2006
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    Beautifully penned message! The flow and rhyme are great but the meaning within the words is far greater.
    A lovely write and the photo is an amazing background choice for your thoughts.
    Blessings! Tammy

  • She Stole My Voice
    September 9, 2006
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    Wow. Amazing. I really liked the ending "Will you be different and let the color shine from your soul?
    Or will you let the societal conformity leave in you a hole?"
    Beautiful. Keep up the killer work and take care

    ~ImmortalUndead~


  • AgeofAquarius
    September 9, 2006
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    W RITE ONN !!

    Great write Tim

    It proves your are an artist in color of grafix and color of pen as well...

    Well thought out and powerful in the subtlety of life such a the flower penned for..


  • FireyAura
    September 9, 2006
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    Wow Tim, this is really awesome! The rhyming, the imagery and the message were all really great. I loved how you used something as simple as a flower and relayed it to society. Your poem is so powerful, and yet also so true to so many people. I promise though, my dear brother, you are not the only "red flower." Keep standing up and doing what you know is right. I have found that when you are doing right, you begin to see that others are as well, and not just yourself. Best luck in the contest Tim, you have a beautiful poem here written from your heart.

    ~*Chelsea*~


  • YerTweetyness
    September 9, 2006
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    Nice!

  • jodygirl
    September 9, 2006
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    Very impressive write. I think as far as colors go, for myself anyway, I don't usually give it a thought. As long as your soul is pure, you can be any color your little heart desires. Even Kermit had problems being "green," but it didn't stop him from having some very intelligent thoughts and feelings. My best to you in the contest. Your poem excels.
    Joan


  • Rym Lover
    September 9, 2006
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    it is amazingly amazing!!! i should say this!!! You had done a worthful work i really like it!!even the ryming word r also chosen very creatively 2nd stanza is really very nice i liked it! Good Job once again i hope you'll win the contest


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 9, 2006
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    Excellent :f

    Colour is what life is all about...many colours are muted by pressure in society but many shine through leaving their own impressions on an otherwise shaded world. "Be true to thine own self" comes to mind Well expressed and a delight to read.


  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    September 9, 2006
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    wow, you are amazing. This is so very well written, and your point is very clear. Powerful and beautiful and just plain amazing. I love the small red flower.....brilliance. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Salt Walker
    September 8, 2006
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    brilliant once again tim gret job
    ^Xerox^


  • OnlyInMyDreams
    September 8, 2006
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    This is so very powerful and beautiful! I loved it. You know that you write rhyming poem so much better than anyhting ive read on this site? Im so jealous. But thats ok, I love your poetry anyway. This poem was so meaningful, the message that you tried to send out to your readers was great, you should always be yourself and not follow the crowd. Breat Job and good luck in the contest

    XOXO
    Kara!


  • mzblondemoments
    September 8, 2006
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    Sharcu
    This is a very notable and compelling write. Effective imagery, impressive rhyme. Very strong emotive piece and an enjoyable read with a strong message. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.

    ~much love~
    ~carol


  • I AM SpokenFor
    September 8, 2006
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    so when you started writing it, did you indend for it to be about a person? and was the color intentional? Because a person being "red" could refer to them being covered in the Jesus' blood...just a thoght...LOVELY write, Tim :0) Very nice indeed. I've found that the best works tend to evolve themselves ;o)

    In His Peace,
    ~*~Kay~*~
    Edited on Sep 08, 5:39 p.m. because 'typo'.


  • runandhide
    September 8, 2006
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    Brilliant Poem.
    Love it. ITs so deep and just really really good.
    Although i would have to say that you are not the only red flower...
    rah


  • Vorondwen gold member
    September 8, 2006
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    Wow...very powerful. It's amazing how much people desire to conform to the trends, etc...I like being eclectic. You have done such a beautiful job here. The flow, the imagery, the story line...great! Good luck in the contest, hun!


  • Kari gold member
    September 8, 2006
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    Deep

    oh wow this was so very deep....I think a lot of people will and can relate to this...I love the first few verses...thanks and the best of luck to you in the contest!

    Kari


  • noble1
    September 8, 2006
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    Excellently written! I understood it perfectly! I'm sure you will do well in the contest!! God bless you! Noble1


  • astralshepherd gold member
    September 8, 2006
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    With so much black and white in the world, everyone shouting for, demanding we all see the shades of gray, not just the black and white, its nice to know someone sees color. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard

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