The sun goes down, it sinks away
So far beyond the Western Seas
And dusk falls over sea and land,
Darkness over lakes and trees.
A ray of light, the last today
Shines soft on raindrops, on the leaves,
Sets fire to the mountain tops
And the unwary eye deceives.
Such burning red fills up the sky.
The white clouds turn an orange glow,
Perfected by the glistening rain
And whispering wind through trees doth blow.
So silent does the water flow
Into the darkening Western Seas.
It's coloured by the setting sun,
Which casts its shadows in the trees.
Author notes
Written September 8th, 2006
I choose option number 4 - the nature one.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended March 30, 2007, 31 entries
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A ray of light, the last today
Shines soft on raindrops, on the leaves,
Sets fire to the mountain tops
And the unwary eye deceives.
Such burning red fills up the sky.
The white clouds turn an orange glow,
Perfected by the glistening rain
And whispering wind through trees doth blow
it was great, wonderful imaginary ......... after all you are my favorite
how are you?
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful word
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A ray of light, the last today
Shines soft on raindrops, on the leaves,
Sets fire to the mountain tops
And the unwary eye deceives.
Such burning red fills up the sky.
The white clouds turn an orange glow,
Perfected by the glistening rain
And whispering wind through trees doth blow
it was great, wonderful imaginary ......... after all you are my favorite
how are you?
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful word -
This is a really beautiful piece. And the way you chose your background and text colour, just fits perfectly. It gives you a sort of illusion or images of the things in the poem. Amazing!
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freaking wow!!! i felt like i was there! this is so beautifulx180003938272! great job. i like your style!
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very good
I ♥ it ... it`s very nice how you described the situation...and you have good rhymes, good work ♥ -
Standing Ovation...
This was a great write,
'And whispering wind through trees doth blow'
I especially liked this line, seeing that the 'whispering wind'
means so much to me...
Overall I really loved it...
Keep it up!!!
illusion
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Bravo!!!
This is a superb poem! Wonderful, excellent! It has the expert ring of the old classics! I absolutely loved it! Bravo!!!
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