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struggling to do right...

It’s been so long you looking for work and finally you found it.
Wish I can be proud o’ you but I’m not.

You’ve been working for five days, on a Friday your boss is giving you stories.
When it comes to your payment,
Stay awake all the night hopping the problem could resolve the next day cause you went to bed with no thing in your stomach, and you got no thing in your pockets.
And your room is dark as ever cause you do not have money to buy them candles,
And you are cold in these old blankets.

God had your prayers…
Your consciousness tells you to do the holly thing.
You go to church on Sunday to praise the Sire.
But your priest put you in an emotional angle where you feel like God NEED your money.
With sweet lines, and skillful strategy.

Shame!!!
You give it all to the hands o’ the holly actors.
The evil man ‘em self.

Now it’s Monday night.
All alone again in your room, your room is still dark as ever,
And you stomach is still empty like your pockets.
And your priest is driving new wheels.
What is wrong with my people?

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Written September 7th, 2006

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  • i guess people are just greedy - and it goes on everywhere, give all you have, suffer while we live in smiles. a good poem.

  • winy star
    September 30, 2006
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    this is very much true... the scarcity of true love is killing our poeple i just wish i could change everything but i can't for i won't


  • Found an Angel
    September 18, 2006
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    Wow I never saw that trouble for believers. I barely believed in that stuff it was only a year i think but I do say shame on those kind of people for doing that to their believers. I say forget that stuff cause the bible as far as I know never said you had to go to church to pray and believe. you can do that in your own sacred place. I'm glad you believe in something strongly though. I will be honest I think you could have done better in writing this but it still moves me.


  • Makaskill
    September 15, 2006
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    That is very much true brother...'em priests and pastors from the big famous churches do that...Make you see the need to pay the cash, but 'em do it in such a way as to get a little more for 'emselves...Truly brother, I believe yo words, when ya said yo consciousness has elevated to another level...May Qamatakatayi shower yo with His richest benedictions...Peace