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The Wall

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The clatter of the horse’s hoofs disrupts the morning air,
And catches all the feeding birds completely unaware.
The gravel crunches ‘neath the wheels, the pavement old and worn.
The wagon creaks and slowly stops on this October morn.


 

I’ve come this way so many times, the horses have their head,
And so they stop on my command, as usual, left unsaid.
They puff and snort, their steamy breath drifts t’ward the sunless sky.
The one looks back with big brown eye, as if to ask me why.


 

Yes, why is it so many times I’ve stopped along this road,
In this, my big old wagon, now devoid of any load?
What is it here that draws me, that keeps me coming back?
Is there something quite unique, an aphrodisiac?


 

It’s stretched out there before me, just like it’s always been,
And when I think about it all, there’s nowhere to begin.
It seems it’s always been there, or at least it has for me,
Results the builders of that wall just never could foresee.


 

My thoughts swing back to years ago, I think that I was eight.
I’d hide behind that very wall, beside my best friend Nate.
The Redcoats didn’t have a chance, we never missed a shot,
I, a son of Plymouth Rock and he, a Hugenot.


Through the quickly passing years our games had changed a bit.
The wars we fought had diff'rent foes, and I must admit
The Indians were not our friend, our flintlocks belched and roared.
 Behind our safe and friendly wall, we fought the savage horde.

 

Then we switched to World War Two, our wall was now in France.
We fought the war in that one place, not trying to advance.
Our wall secure, where we did hide, and giggle, plan and fight,
Till shadows and the dark’ning sky warned of the coming night.


 

Today I stop here as a man, and see the wall anew.
And in my very heart of hearts, I know what I must do.
It’s something I don’t understand, my brain cannot define,
Just how this land with its stone wall is destined to be mine.


 

The smile that lights my face today wells up from deep inside,
A mixture of the joy I feel and of my deep-held pride.
The rocks and stones that make the wall are but a testament
To craftsmen of a bygone past, no mortar or cement.


 

They’re stacked with tender loving care, how many years ago?
Some have guessed a hundred years, I think we’ll never know.
I guess there’s some who want to know, who cling to time and dates,
But sitting with my horse and team I just anticipate


 

Just when the vibrant orange and reds that brighten dismal days
Will fill my cabin windows with their warm and rich displays,
And I can hide behind that wall just like I did before,
And see its simple beauty through my open cabin door.

Author notes

Walls can things of great security.  The walls we have as kids often disappear, and with that disappearance goes the security that was there.  Some are lucky enough to be able to keep the walls and the security - or, is that really just hiding.  Something to think about.
Written September 6th, 2006

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  • Dancing Feather gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    Such a wonderful poem daddy. I liked how you portrayed using the wall as a shelter from wars that were and are being faught. Many people hide from feelings let alone other people putting up a wall so nothing can hurt them like. I really liked this poem.


    Kayla Marie


  • Vagabond
    April 3, 2007

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    Great work, certainly worthy of the gold in the previous contest you entered. The length of some of the lines was a little bit at odds with the length of others, but it did not impede the flow. You've managed to tell a very interesting story here, and i'm impressed with how well you did in handling the topic. It is strange how many forms a simple object can take in the eyes of a child, and how those forms can so easily resolve into nothingness when we are older and veiw those simple objects again. You've done a great job here, fantastic work, thanks for entering and best of luck in my contest!


  • Mrs.Snowflake
    October 8, 2006
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    Hey Paul, i aint heard from ya in a while, how are ya? Well, i was lookin at your sight and this poem caught my eye and i thought i would let you know that i love how when you write, it's like your in the words, and inviting each reader to join you, to take the words and imagine yourself in every situation, or place that the poem is going. Thank you so much for writing your an insparation to so many. Love Always
    You lil one,
    Elizabeth
    PS-aint heard from ya in a day or two and was wonderin how ya were? I been doing aight lately but a td stressed still from the accident...i drove for the first time in a week tonight only like a 10min drive but it still scares me some. Anyways, talk to ya soon...
    God Bless Ya


  • September 25, 2006
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    I love this writing! It's amazing!!


  • Legend silver member
    September 19, 2006
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    Congratulation on a excellent poem and a more than well deserved Gold


  • maa gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    your poem is such a delight, kirbysman !
    and I would like to congratulate you sincerely to your truly deserved gold-trophy. I could learn a lot from you, and thank you so much for your wonderful poetic offering here in this contest ...
    all the best,
    and many blessings,

    maa


  • FifthDove
    September 19, 2006
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    Congratulations on the gold placement. A truly deserving poem


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    Congratulations for winning gold in this contest - a lovely poem and picture you have entered here.


  • Maldronah
    September 16, 2006
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    Admired your craftsmanship. Learned a few things. Think it needs
    a leetle more sandpaper but I'd be proud to claim it. One thing tho: Good walls make good neighbors but some walls make enemies.

  • pozo
    September 16, 2006
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    Great poem which flowed beautifully. I like the use of rhyme here, this was a really good poem. I liked the use of nature in this poem. I liked the enigma which ran through this interesting, gripping poem. This was a very interesting poem with a lot of depth. Keep writing, this was a great narrative poem. Very interesting use of imagery here. This was a good poem which showed the nature of the thought process rather well. It showed memories very clearly with an interesting use of charm.
    All the best
    Pozo


  • Mythtress
    September 13, 2006
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    Wonderful thought...and wonderful question. Keep it up, wonderful poet. Write on.


  • gwynethshugart
    September 13, 2006
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    GREAT STORYLIKE POEM!

    The amount of applause says it all, doesn't it? You get one more from me! What a great storylike poem! I loved it! Thank you for sharing and please keep on penning?


  • babys-no-angel
    September 13, 2006
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    and some of us build bigger walls.... this was superb... eloquently written... deep and meaningful... best i have read on this site . no exception...xxx


  • forever dreaming
    September 13, 2006
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    Such a profound piece of writing that speaks volumes. Good luck in the contest.


  • gullionmar
    September 13, 2006
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    very lovely piece true of many a wall from our childhood awsome writing


  • nichtmich silver member
    September 13, 2006
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    Eloquent

    This is universal, it describes the yearning in all of us for that safe place we call home. Whether it is a house or a place in our hearts. Walls can define it, but don't fully explain the peace we find there. I don't think that you, personally, are hiding. There are many that do, a personal choice. You are a master at your craft and this is a shining example.


  • paullallady silver member
    September 13, 2006
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    amazing

    first I want to say that I love walls like this one that you spoke so endearinly about. second, this is one of my favorite poems of all times. this flowed and told a story that held me captivated. I love the sweet images of the two young boys hiding behind the wall playing and then the image of the adult man wanting to have this wall so it will never change, it will always be protected and kept and loved, the way it should. amazing, wonderful, awesome.


  • adios muchachos gold member
    September 13, 2006
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    Someone said "Fences make the best neighbors". I don't know! But this is a lovely poem. Glad there is someone who will tackle a long poem now and again!
    Great stuff. Wishing you further good luck in this contest!

    Bluff


  • Sonja
    September 13, 2006
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    Very, very nice story with yur childhood memories and the wall like your life rality. This is much more than poem story. I can see you pointoing to us not only this wall. We are all surounded with all different kind of walls from the past, today and also building all the time some walls for future to keep us safe. When I saw this poem I said to me - oh my, who will read it, it is too ong, but once when I started it put into my feelings and brain such a magic wand of poetic art. Very nice choosen description make to be like a novel presented with movie. Realy nice done. Bravo!
    ~Sonja~


  • otepsaint
    September 13, 2006
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    Great poem I love it, good luck int he contest, you diserve it, i could picture everything youwe re saying inm y head, that is amazing


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 13, 2006
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    I read your writings ….you are amazing……..keep it up...Never stop writing. . ..... ... Did you read anything from me on this site?.


  • Jaded Lily gold member
    September 12, 2006
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    Just as profound as your poem were your author's comments in that there are many who use the walls in their lives as a means to hide. I loved this piece from beginning to end with the vibrant imagery it captured me with. I could hear the horse's hooves on the path and see their steamy breath snort in the October air. There was much more that stood out, but no need to recount your entire piece to you. Excellent write, Paul. I should be more mindful about visiting your work as I've yet to leave here without a wonderful, calm feeling.
    Bravo!

    Love and Blessings,

    Lily


  • Despondent Angel
    September 12, 2006
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    What a lovely read. Delightful and refreshing and makes one look back and ponder things from years ago. Perfect write, I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • Ishtar
    September 9, 2006
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    Defintely can relate.

    Well said, Paul and thank you for sharing, once again.

    -Reni


  • wakingdevil
    September 8, 2006
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    Whatever the outcome of this contest, you are truly the best poet in originality and in the way you express the beauty of the poems and weave them together brilliantly.This was outstanding and excellently written.It was completely flawless and brimmed with your unending thoughts.You are a fantastic poet and all I can wish you is the best of luck in whatever you do and thank you for entering this marvellous piece in my contest.This was a pleasure to read


  • queenie
    September 7, 2006
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    this seemed to end too soon.i felt that i could have keep on reading because i was so caught up in all aspects of this including the structure.it was very enrapturing and truly captivating.it spun a tale that was deep and was thought-provoking as well.excellent beyonf belief and as great as you are,this surpassed even you.


  • daviscth silver member
    September 7, 2006
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    Oh my goodness, this so had me from the first line!
    We go driving sometimes just to look at walls like these. I think they're awesome and would give anything to have one to hide behind.


  • Legend silver member
    September 7, 2006
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    There are some poems that seem endless after s couple of lines, and some that seem far to short after great lengths. This is one of the latter.So caught up in it was I that I never wanted it to end.Rhyme when it is done so truly shows the talent of the author. A fantastic piece and one that was a joy to this reader Good luck in the contest

  • She Stole My Voice
    September 6, 2006
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    Ah! My fave part was "The clatter of the horse’s hoofs disrupts the morning air,
    And catches all the feeding birds completely unaware"

    Your poetry is just so amazing. Keep up the killer work and take care

    ~ImmortalUndead~


  • Kari gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    Awesome

    Now most Beat stuff doesn't mean crap to me. I am picky about Beat..but this was incredible. I loved it. I think it is one of the best Ive read. Best of luck to u in the contest!

    Kari


  • soulfultia gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    AWESOME

    Well this is just a beautifully expressive writing which gives a mental illustration to the reader as if a picture in just being penned with the same that wrote the poem. Just a gift you have.... Love the read and look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing this with us!


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    Wonderful tale you tell here relating back to years ago when you were a child up to the present - and what the wall meant then and still does today. Great rhythm and rhyme - lovely picture as well.


  • September 6, 2006
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    wow! This is an amazing piece of work you have done here. You held me all the way through and I could visualize everything as I was reading. This is a very welcoming and calming poem so glad I clicked thoght it was going to be a dark poem.

  • Rudolf
    September 6, 2006
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    a song a dance

    this is like a song and dance ,I simply can't ignore .It's likly it's the best,that i have read before.keep it up ,the work you do. very inspired , and very true. we have a similiar stuff,style ,whatever ...!,check me out and tell me what you really think ...rudolf


  • Sharcu silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    You are one of the best poets in my opinion that is on this site and I'm sure you'll do very well in this contest. I saw you are promoting your poem and thought I'd stop by to give you a comment (though I saved you the featuring points ) Well done!
    --Tim


  • Cunningtrickster
    September 6, 2006
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    this is a good write...very interesting...it's amazing isn't it...being subconsciously drawn to you childhood playgrounds... sometimes you really don't even remember where that place is.but in the back of your mind you never really forgot...thanx for the read and keep it up.

    -cunningtrickster


  • lovelifelive gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    love it just love it your talent your style an grace in time in a different place this could never be replaced

  • book2garden
    September 6, 2006
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    This is a great poem! It flows so nicely
    full of imagry. I feel that I am right there
    on the path. I think of Robert Frost. Good job.


  • BonBon
    September 6, 2006
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    Love your writings they contain food for thought, beauty and so much more. When I first looked at this picture...a calm came and I thought how beautiful.
    Good jobber
    BonBon


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 6, 2006
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    I think the title fits your write, nicely... what life deals is held within the walls of homes, sad at times but you penned this well with the traveling down many roads of life.. thank you for sharing..MM


  • DevonJM
    September 6, 2006
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    Art

    Again I am awestruck. You are a master in your element, a truly enlightened person. I love being here, in your world. I hope the walls in your life stay firm and never you betray. For you here is like them to me in many different ways.

    *standing ovation*


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    September 6, 2006
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    Very well done.. It was done with so much vivid imagery and the wording just flowed. Great job
    Soulful Woman


  • Molassis
    September 6, 2006
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    Walls hum? Yes indeed... walls can be very good things at times...

    Papa Paul... this is SO very well written... you always write with such grand style and grace and it's ALWAYS a pleasure to read your fine works...

    God bless you Papa Paul...

    ~Melissa


  • Tangled Angle
    September 6, 2006
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    This was great.... I am not sure if I can think off a title.. BUt this was really good and I think you did an awesome job. Wow. I just have to applaud this dude. Good luck in the contest man.

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