i like to glance at you secretly
when we're driving in the car
with the radio playing softly;
you humming
as we drive to the edge of the world
and when we drove away all our sorrow
we sit with our feet swinging off the edge
of the planet
just listening to the sound of
needles pricking the silence in outer space.
i like it when you tilt your head
slightly to the right and breathe,
when you feel overwhelmed by youth
liberated.
when you ask me
"have you ever felt so small
when you stand there
just looking,
searching for the ends of the ocean?"
i just smile at you, lovingly and
nod my head
i know. i know.
then sometimes you take my hand
pull me closer
and you tell me to close my eyes
because magic only lives
in the space
between my eyes and eyelids.
just you and i –
we sit there:
where time goes backwards and
where the truth doesn't lie
away from the buzzing sound
of fast cars.
we spend our time there,
our feet dangling off
the edge of the planet
listening to the pulse
of earth,
looking for a shooting star
under a carpet of planets
hung by silver strings and
tied to heavens floor.
there where we sip the poetry
from our souls and inhale
the melodies of our hearts.
oh,
i want you to know
i like it when you take me there
with the radio playing softly
just you and i –
away from fast cars &
judging eyes;
just you and i -
on the edge of eternity.
Author notes
written for someone special. 
i'm not happy with the ending yet, but i'll add to it when i feel inspired.
Written September 6th, 2006
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Magnificent!!!!!
love the lines :
'because magic only lives
in the space
between my eyes and my eyelids'
Very nice poem! I like the feeling i get while reading it, so in love...
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Beautiful.
This poem was breathtaking.
I absolutely LOVE it.
I love how you describe everything, like you leave in a state of perpetual happiness, and awe.
It's truly amazing.
Your work is so original, I love it.
I can't wait to read the edit.
<3Rebecca
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I just love the imagination that you put into this. I find myself thinking the same way, just looking at the stars and getting lost in the meaning of love, life, and existence. Whoever this person is, it sounds like you share a-lot of the same thoughts of the world. I wish I had somone like that to sit and think with.
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A delicacy
This atmosphere is fit for breath
Of those in love, who sweetly see
The softness in each other's eyes.
You always had a way
Of creating a place
Where words no longer matter
There is something, in this
Of that ungraspable phantom
Of life -
Well, in my race to catch up on all my favourites after my two weeks of vacation in the South of France (where my muse ran away
) I come on your page 
What a beautiful poem you've written here sweety, so much pleasant tastes of magnificent feelings you have captured within the words...
sip the poetry... dang it
I wish I invented that 
Such a superb writing sweetyhun
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Song of the heart here!
Lana, You amaze me! This is enchanted, and makes me want to be 16-17 all over again. The tone is that of a letter written with stardust...
"you tell me to close my eyes
because magic only lives
in the space
between my eyes and eyelids"
I am so proud of you--your ability to see and write outside the box. Even if this poem is not finished to your satisfaction, I see memories in the making, treasure to cherish... and one of the sweetest girls I know sparkling with an awesome talent for writing.
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