My eyes they filled with tears
When I first heard the news
I kept you in my prayers
To win and not to lose
You were so positive
Kept a smile on your face
Said you have so much to give
And life you would embrace
Some days they were so hard
You struggled with the pain
But with each note and card
Your strength you would regain
Your loved ones around you
Would give you so much joy
And they would see you through
Give you moments to enjoy
And after a long year
You have beaten this disease
Your life you hold so dear
Its pleasures do not cease
Author notes
For my aunt who survived breast cancer. She is a true inspiration, she remained so positive throughout her ordeal. She says this experience has made her a stronger person and she appreciates life so much more.
Written September 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- Cancer [PWs Allowed] by LeilaJayne.
400 points, ended October 17, 2008, 26 entries
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This bought a tear to my eye, out of joy. Its so wonderful when someone beats this awful disease. Beautifully written, thank for entering x
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A beautiful and wonderfully inspirational piece. Very nicely done. A pleasure to read, enjoy, and KNOW. Such a beautiful gift you have given her. Wonderful. ~Pam
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Beautiful poem
This is a very beautiful poem to your aunt. She would be very proud to know that you have written this for her. Love and affection shine through in this piece as well. I lost my dad to cancer, so I know what it is like. the whole family goes through torture. God bless. -
Sooooooo Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!
Kiran,
This is so beautiful my dear sweet friend. Your words to your aunt that came from your heart touched mine deeply. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed softly like a meandering river. I'm very happy that your aunt beat this dreaded disease and with the strength of your words I am sure you were there to support her all the way. You get a standing ovation to go along with my applause here. Kudos to both you and your aunt.
Love and blessings for you, today and always.
Joyce
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This is a very good write that you had penned here for your aunt, she got lucky as I lost both of my parents to cancer. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem
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They tell me that it takes 5 years before you can feel relatively sure that you've "beaten" the big C.
I think you've done a good job on this in the main, but it is definitely Hallmark Card rhyming. It is also a partial punctuation poem, since capital letters are a type of punctuation. That is never a good thing. However, I am not judging the poem on style or form or anything of that nature. I am judging it on how I feel about the poet and the poem after reading it. I think you have done a good job of expressing your feelings to the person you're speaking to here, but do think it would be a stronger poem if that person were mentioned in the poem, and not only in the comments box.
In any case, thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest and in your future writing. Kudos to your aunt.
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This is a beautiful and emotionally charged. Well done dear poet. Stunning.
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Bravo!
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always nice to hear of people surviving cancer of any form. perhaps one day soon the boffins will find a cure - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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A lovely tender write so full of hope and optimism.that in itself is half the battle I think.beautiful flow to this supportive piece well done to you
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A very encouraging poem.I am so pleased all is ok.A long year maybe but a very positive outcome, thank goodness, Ros
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