When bitterness becomes more bitter not to be answered;
When problems force me to my knees;
When difficulties squeeze the bones
Then, Zephyr, start blowing from the North.
Come to my cottage
And bring glad tidings: Friends words.
Then over two wings of phantom,
Free from the thought of today and tomorrows,
Ill flutter eagerly to your Flower Garden;
Take shelter in the firm cypress.
You lay foundation of poetry
And Ill devour as much as I can.
Like a nimble gazelle Ill pursue you.
Ill peer into every side of your Garden,
leaping to smell your sweet ghazals.
Im drunk on the Love Elixir
You deposited in the words hearts;
Elixir changing my copper body into gold.
I wander in meandrous rhyme and rime
while you compose the most magnificent lyrics.
I am friendless, drowned in the stormy sea.
Youre a captain steering your ship on huge oceans of poetry.
As I am inserting Feeling in the awkward frame of words,
Silvery beams of the moon,
unique rays of the above world in the dark night,
Softly enter my room
While the moon is peeping me smiling.
A playful dandelion becomes a guest to my nightly privacy.
I hold her white body in my hands and whisper:
Little bride of cleanliness! Open your wings and fly to Shiraz.
Strew flowers on Friends shrine.
Tell him although he didnt linger longer in this world
His sweet words will remain forever!
Author notes
This poem is for Sheikh Sadi Shirazi. Hes one of the greatest and famous poets in Iran (My country). His books are Golestan (Flower Garden) and Boostan (Garden) which I used above in my poem. One of his beautiful ghazals is Love Elixire. As many of you might guess, his shrine is located in Shiraz.
Wow, I felt so special when I was writing this.. my weak pen and greatness of Sadi?!
Mr Mohammad Taghi Bahar another great poet in Iran- have write about him with his sweet words. Not bad to be shared:
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Heartiest appreciations again for my AP auntie (mamad) for helping me correct this. She's always a great support to me 
Written September 6th, 2006
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Massy, You have done a wonderful job. You've used such elegant language and sophisticated tone in this write, it's almost awe-inspiring. I am so glad I came across such a beautiful work! It's outstanding! Keep up the brilliant work! Sophie.
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Ahsantom
A beautiful collection of words my sister, this poem is really boiling out of gems. My sweet sister, its toooooooooo great write of your. I loved the words, thoughts, expression, depth and in and around everything of the poem. Just like Khalil Jibran's deep words. Great work, hats off to you!!! -
bravo , this is wonderful . goodluck to you in the contest
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this piece was nothing short of amazing my friend the picture you paint with words actualy makes the reader get so much into this write.
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hi there,
You've done a wonderful job here. Glad you've introduced one of our greatest poets to AP people.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Ah what lovely work, your AP mum, Nermin Nazim had asked me to read this.
Such a truly wonderful tribute and peice, the words and imagery used quite make me want to check Sheikh Sadi Shirazi works. I am quite sure I wont be displeased.
All I can say is what wonderous work you've done. Amazing. Bravo.
Though I believe you made a typo mistake in the last few stanzas, where beans of moon something should ought to be "beams"
I do hope you win the contest, goodluck to you.
Cheers,
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Outstanding
There is nothing I can add that has not already been said. Absolutely beautiful and a tribute fit for a king. BRAVO!!!! -
Splendid work my dear.
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this is some awesome writing here your words flow with such ease I do not know of the poet you speak about, but must be an enlighting poet your words say so....
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A magnificent write...
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good
this is good. the flow is wonderful and the
rhythm is great. I love the lines:
I wander in meandrous rhyme and rime
while you compose the most magnificent lyrics.
I am friendless, drowned in the stormy sea.
Youre a captain steering your ship on huge oceans of poetry.
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Beautiful! I can see the love you have for your favorite poet in every line! Great job on this, and good luck in the contest!
Lynda
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a creative piece here, i enjoyed reading, a lovely flow to your poem
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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It is absolutely magnetic and so alluring, your choice of words, your love spilt in emotions emerging from the passion your heart, mind and soul show. it is absolutely stupendous.
i promoted it for you, not because you are my beloved daughter, but because you deserve it.
THIS IS ABSOLUTELY ENCHANTING AND SOOOO CRAFTFULLY WRITTEN AND SAID MY DEAR DAUGHTER.
LOVE YOU MUCH
YOUR MOM
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This is a superior form usage as it displays the ability of poetry, at times, to draw images better than any "visual" artist ever could in their work! It comes off in a style, which really became popular in late 60's America, that is like a role of movie film, each still its own image while belonging to a needed whole...or, put another way, this poetry presentation is like a series of photographs which are taken of a common subject. There is no question that this particular creator loves the work of whom she is successfully honoring, not to mention, it displays the poet's own deft ability by being able to "end" this poem right on point and slaking its receivers (not an easy thing to do, even for the best of the authors, no matter what "written" format is being used to express a presentation)!
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This is truly a touching tribute to your favorite poet, Sheikh Sadi Shirazi. Just the titles of the book you referenced rang out with true notes of beauty. I love many of the Indian and Hindu poets. I salivate over their imagery and command of language. I liked the nature images in your poem, particularly the lovely flowers you praised. You convey many of the senses--in fact, I think all of them. Thank you for this heart-warming entry to the contest. Belle
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Massy..I am very glad to know about such a talented poet of whom I had never known before.Sadi Shirazi,indeed is a talented poet,I just checked out his works.
Very genuine write.strongly woven words,Great...
You have done a great job on this poem...
Wishing you success in contest...
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SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL !!!!!!!!1
You know what, Massy, I am actually ENCHANTED by this poem of yours. I absolutely love Sheikh Saadi though I have only read his "Gulistan", he is one of those writers from whom I seek inspiration and who motivate me to do good. And you have written such a BEAUTIFUL tribute to him. I wonder how happy he would have been if he would have read these verses. And, yeah, I have also expereienced this :
When bitterness becomes more bitter not to be answered;
When problems kneel me down;
When difficulties squeeze the bones
Then Zephyr! Start blowing from the North.
Come to my cottage
And bring glad tidings, Friends words.
I also feel that Saadi and some other inspiring writers come to my help when "problems kneel me down" . I feel as if they cast a healing spell on me through the magical power of their words. I share this feeling with you.
The most impressive thing about this poem is its beautiful images especially the pictorial ones like " friendless drowned in the sea", "captain driving your ship on huge ocean of poetry" etc. They are THRILLING, ABSOLUTELY THRILLING ! As far as the mistakes are concerned, I was so struck by the charm of your poem that I didn't paid any attention on that side. Well, I'll see about them after a little while.
I really, really, really, wish you will win this contest !
( Insha Allah )
Hail the King of Poets, Saadi Shirazi !
P.S : Massy, I have only read a few poems by you and for me this one is the best of them. I loved it !
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Honestly, I think you are the most unique poet I've come across. You have this great way of saying things in ways that I would not think to say them, but that make sense and work very nicely with your poetry. This was an awesome poem, thank you for telling me about it.
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It is a really beautiful poem. Unfortunatly I am not familiar with Irani poets, but thanks to you I am now
It is very beautiful and I really loved the final stanza.
Keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
Nooni
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Dearewt niece,
This has such beautiful thought,as do all of your poems. I am going to IM you with some change suggestions, if you want me to. Also; The lines you have written in Persian (?, Farsi ?; arabian ?) please translate them so that those of us who have only English can enjoy them. -
Well honestly, I'd have to say that this was a nice piece of poetry. While I very much enjoyed reading lines such as:
Then Zephyr! Start blowing from the North.
Elixir changing my copper body into gold.
While the moon is peeping me smiling
... among others, there are places throughout the poem that felt kind of rough. I understand why, and really appreciate your effort here. I too, am not familiar with the poet of your inspiration, but am curious to know what a "ghazal" is. Good luck to you in the contest. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Prince
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I have never had the pleasure of reading poetry from Sa'di Shirazi...you commerorate him with loving words and heartfelt images. Thank you for entering my contest with this wonderful tribute and good luck to you...
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Very nice, Massy, send it to him
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