Today is another day,
That I'm living without you.
The ache in my soul,
Is more than I can bear.
Over and over I wonder,
Why did it have to be you?
Just a few short days ago,
And we were speaking of love.
We talked of a life,
With home and with kids.
A warmth that had chilled,
Just warming up again.
Now you're gone,
Taken from me.
You've returned to the earth,
Gone back to the Lord.
Our hopes and our dreams,
Washed down the drain.
Our future shattered,
With one swift shot.
Your life cut short,
Ours barely begun.
The anger inside,
Burns deep.
I must fight to get free,
Or it will eat me alive.
I made promises to you,
And those I will keep.
But I wrestle,
To break lose from the pain.
I go to our bed,
And your side is empty.
Never to be filled,
You rest beyond here now.
The numbness seeps out,
Replaced with hurt and rage.
How could someone be so careless,
To take you from me?
Today is one more day,
That I must live without you.
Today I visit a stone,
Instead of kissing your lips.
Today I have to get up,
Move beyond these walls.
If I want to see you,
I must go to where you lay.
Today my heart breaks again,
As I wake up alone.
My soul is forever broken,
Because I must go on without you.
Author notes
The man I love was shot and killed on August 30, 2006 and there will always be an empty space in my heart and soul where he once stood.
Written September 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- Round 1 of 5 : Your Best Piece by Kei-Aira.
300 points, ended September 30, 2006, 73 entries
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This is a very sad and emotional write, but I am afraid to say that a lot of it is rather cliched. Most of the things you say are seen constantly by dumped teenagers on this site. I appreciate you are using those words and images in a different context, but it kind of makes the poem seem unoriginal and cliched and a little bland to be honest. It doesn't really grab the reader, and it is about a third of the way through the poem that the reader recognises that this is about an actual loss of love, rather than teenage love splitting up. I think it is a good basis for a poem, but you need to develop it more and inject some of your own personality into it, rather than using cliched phrases and images.
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck.
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so sad but so true
I cannot tell you how sorry i am to find out what happened to your beloved my dear! your words made me cry so much, the feelings of pain and bleeding of your heart were oozing from your wounded words.
my dear, i cannot afford but tell you, May God ease your pain!
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