Who gave you the right to say
I can't live
Was it something I did
I am just a tiny being
growing here inside
I have nowhere to go
nowhere to hide
Just because I'm little
doesn't mean I don't have rights
I am just too little to fight
I did not ask to be born
during your passionate storm
You could have taken safety measures
but all you could think of was your pleasures
You say I am not a life
until I am so many weeks old
But I can tell you
that when your sperm
hit the egg, I was one day old
Who are you to decide if I live or I die
I am just a being with feelings inside
I can hear that you don't want me
I know that you think that I cannot hear or see
Don't you know this hurts me desperately
If you don't want me
I am pleading please
I am sure that there is a family
out there who would want me
as their own, and love me tenderly
So before you let that doctor in
with his knife to
cut me out and
take my life
Just remember that this could have
been you, if your mother did not choose life
So let me ask again
who gave you the right
to say I can't live
I never did
So please reconsider this
Author notes
I wrote this poem from the unborn babies aspect. I also wrote Oh Lord A Mother's Plea the aspect from the mom. I am not taking sides I am writing poetry. Please read both poems before you judge me to harshly.
Written September 5th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Would You Do It? by Sapphire Rose.
400 points, ended October 17, 2006, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best Prewrite by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended February 25, 2007, 105 entries
Silver trophy winner
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300 points, ended March 19, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me think by see me fly 2.
1500 points, ended August 29, 2007, 56 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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verry nice. you have a lot of feeling.
thank you.
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This is a lovely poem..
I'm first of all fascinated by the mix of both rhyme and free verse together but wasn't really sure how that would turn out.
You were right about this sounding really similiar to my poem but I'm glad you directed me here .. it's an awesome read
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Thanks for your wonderful comments. They mean so much too me. Have a great night and thanks
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A+
Wow.... the lines "Just remember that this could have
been you,
if your mother did not choose life for you.".. they got me. i would've never have thought like that. good job and good luck in the contest
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excellent
Awonderfully written poem about a subject which I think should not be contraversal.You have my vote for Gold
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Thank you I wanted to give the unborn child a voice. Thanks for your kind and caring comments
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Hard-hitting.
I was truly touched by this piece; no mother should use abortion as a way of avoid responsibility.
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Thank you I wrote it from the unborn child's aspect
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I think that the child's point of view is the best aspect to write from; we must speak for the voices who cannot be heard.
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A very moving and powerful poem with a good message, thank you!
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WOW this was an Amazing write and I loved it and I cant get enough of it because it is so sad and right at the same time, im guessing something to the matter of this happened to you and to tell you the truth I think abortion is wrong as well. Thanx for the amazing write and the best of luck to you in the contest!!
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Oh this is deffinitely great...and these lines rock!
I did not ask to be born,
during your passionate storm.
You could have taken safety measures
but all you could think of was your pleasures.
Such power in this penning a voice for the unborn...you go girl!
Becky
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This hits me deep and hurts. I am totally and utterly against abortion and I will forever be. Adoption is a fairer way. The only circumstance I would have an abortion would be if I was to die if I had the baby and that is the only reason. I can't respect those who just choose to have an abortion because the one night stand went wrong.
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Many thanks for the entry! I really enjoyed this poem! I agree with you on so many of the points, although it is often hard to really paint things so black and white. Obviously i respect that you say you aren't judging, which is wise, as many who have made this decision (some friends of mine included) have realised their mistakes, and need none of our judgements.
I did not ask to be born,
during your passionate storm.
To me this says it all. It blows my mind that people can be so casual about such things, almost as if it was another form of contreception, which would have taken very little time actully use. Are we really this lazy? Murder of convienice. how harsh.
I did enjoy this, although the reason you havent placed is that i was looking for a two sided arguement, and a level of critical thinking about society that i don't feel you have employed. If you had related this issue to society at large, then perhaps you could have been in with a good chance!But thank you for the read!
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i think this is an excellent poem. it's so sad that some many people will just throw away the life of an unborn child, never even givig them the chance to take their first breath
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your title to begin with plea's should be pleas
as there own - their own
a good piece though some editing needed. i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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awwwwwwwwwww This is such an AWESOME POEM!!!!!!!!! I love the background... it is a very good one for this poem!!! I hate abortion!!!! I wished they didnt have it... my cousin thought about it with her second child but THANK GOD she didnt do it or I would of never had such an amazing lil nephew... anyways very very nice poem... I need to go and attend to my crying God Son... Well Done!!!!
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Thank you my friend for all the wonderful comments and the applause
Theresa
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I really like this poem. You're an excellent writer. I really like how the rhyme isn't forced, it sounds very natural.
I totally agree, abortion is cruel. But I also think there are two sides of the story, just like you said. There ARE circumstances when it should be allowed. The outlawing of abortions would be a terrible thing to do, but I still find it cruel. It's a situational thing.
I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
Peace and love
----Connor
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Connor, thanks for your wonderful comments and the applause. I also wrote A Mother's Plea I did not know if I could enter two poems or not. But it is from the mothers aspect. Thanks for letting me enter your contest
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Thank you for the Silver trophy it means the world to me. this poem was very hard to write. thanks again and God bless.
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To judge you harshly for a poem written from the child's view would be cruelty. I can honestly say I felt a strong pull from my heart as I read further into this piece, almost telling me that all those who abort their children are monsters, which they technically are, for killing a life, whether our government and scientists say otherwise. What do they know about life, really? To them, we're just people meant to be pleased and to please. That's how I see it anyway. You've written a fantastic piece, and those who say otherwise don't know what they've just read.
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Thank you, this idea just came to me oneday so I did it. I am so glad that you liked it.
Theresa
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Touching
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Thank you for your comments they mean so much to me. I also believe that a baby is alive from the moment of conception, but I wrote poems from two different perspectives. Thanks for liking my poem it really means alot to me. Thanks again Theresa
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Tawk,
I dont like to get into politics with most things, but abortion is one thing I do feel strongly about. I do realize that there is a story that goes along with every situation, but I agree that a baby is alive the moment it is conceived.
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It's very hard to agree or disagree with this poem. It's well writen, but in a teenage pregnancy, you can give up your whole life for this child or.. well, you know. I don't even agree with those types, so, in conclusion, I agree with this poem.
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Thank you dear sis, and I know that you are not the best right now. Remember that I love you and that I am here for you. thanks again for the comments.
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Thank you!!!!!
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comments they mean so much to me. I just wanted to write a poem from the aspect of an unborn child and what he/she might say to the mother. I am glad that you liked it.
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I think I might have read this. If not, somtehing like it. You raise some good points and topics like this always make me cry. I am not in the best emotional state right now.
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this is really good, i love this poem! And i totally agree with you, i am on the prolife team. This was such a blessing to read.
Good Luck,
alyssa
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