every ones spirits fell
those that have fallen are bid farewell
all war depends on that fact
until they finally come to a pact
all war depends upon it an unbending force
without mercy, without compassion, without remorse
but that is no man that i know in this world
war among us that is what is unfurled
bringing those innocents alongside
you have not lived until you've almost died
artillery and guns going off around you
one among you falls from a mortar apart him blew
you hear cries of triumph and dismay
not one of your fears of death do you betray
with a sturdy pulse and a deepening heart and eye
every one depending on you "i lead until i die"
war is courage cloaked by fear
in a ditch a mans check drops a tear
Author notes
William Westmoreland, Band of Brothers, Elbridge Jefferson Cutler thank you for the awsome quotes that lead me to this poem.
Written September 5th, 2006
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'war is courage cloaked by fear'
EXCELLENTLY written, I really enjoyed this - and will have to come back and read it again when I have more time!
Thanks for entering and sharing with us all
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This is a very nicely done. Really scary because its true. I have a brother in Iraq, he's a marine. I liked the flow and the rhyme of this poem. Some of the word choice could have been better and some of the flow even though I liked it, it was kind of thrown off by some punctuation that was needed. other than that. Pretty good. Good luck and thanks for entering.
Josh
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Thank you for entering my military contest. i think this a very well written. I especially like the line:
war is courage cloaked by fear -
Good POV you have written from. Good imagery I can almost feel like I am experiencing these horrible events as I read it. Thank you for this entry.
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Poetically powerful
with wonderful images. As a man oftentimes scared even in peace I can relate. Having been through the first Gulf War was a huge learning curve for me.
Thanks for sharing, best of luck
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this is really powerful!
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a good piece here, war, never easy, but sometimes it is inevitable. band of brothers, i remember that series, it was good. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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