Sitting here alone I wonder
why I never feel your love.
Why I never had a daddy,
like the one all girls dream of.
I know you're disappointed,
and that you'll always be.
You've never tried to forgive or understand,
you didn't want to listen,
especially not to me.
All you saw was betrayal,
nothing but how you hurt.
You forgot about this child's mind,
and what laid inside this heart of dirt.
You forgot the wrongs you had done,
the ones that scared for life.
You just turned your back on this one,
who was struggling to stay alive.
All you see is anger,
at being walked away from in this life.
But are now and will forever be strangers,
you closed your heart to this child who cried.
Daddy I am so sorry,
that you could not understand.
I needed a special hero,
one who would forever hold my hand.
You wouldn't listen or forgive me,
I'll never be enough.
All I wanted in this world,
was my daddy's unconditional love.
I'm never good enough I know this,
never will I be.
I failed as just a child,
worthless is now all I see.
You showed me what you felt,
the anger and disgust in me.
Now you've banished me to hell,
because my daddy's love I'll never see.
One day I hope you may forgive me,
for struggling to stay alive.
For making such an unforgivable mistake,
to disagree instead of die.
I forgive you now and always,
though I'll go on to live in pain.
Knowing I am forever unworthy,
of your love in any way.
What did you think
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Sad, but no.
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So sad.. aw.. you're not unworthy, I'm sad you didn't get your dad.
Callused and bruises, dazed and confused
I thought of that when I read your poem.. Anyway, I'm a judge so..
Favorite lines:
You forgot the wrongs you had done,
the ones that scared for life.
You just turned your back on this one,
who was struggling to stay alive.
Stinging.
Overall score: 9/10
Thanks for entering.
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Great write! Well written!
I like this write, So much emotion to this piece. And I can relate to this so much it's hard to beileve.
"Daddy I am so sorry,
that you could not understand.
I needed a special hero,
one who would forever hold my hand.
You wouldn't listen or forgive me,
I'll never be enough."
Thanks for entering, & Good Luck (sure youwon't need it!) xx -
Wow..... It is like you know me and my dad. Crazy.
Really great poem. I loved the emotion and flow. It was relatible and you put my in your shoes. Great job and keep writing. -
this was great well done
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some of this wording is very
strong and seems to indicate that it was written from the point of view of a child... I really like that about this piece...
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Every child is deserving of love..NO MATTER the circumstances...
This touched my heart deeply
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This is a really good poem, but you need to know that NO one is unworthy. I used to feel that way, but I learned that I was worthy no matter what my father said. I really like this poem even though it is sad, keep up the good work.
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NO-ONE IS UNWORTHY
This is a very well written poem. It's probably from experience and if so I'm sorry. But I want you to know that you are worthy and God loves you and never leaves your side. Please don't let ANYONE put you down and make you feel less than what and who you are. You are beautiful inside and out and you always have God's unconditional love. I'm sorry for your sadness and you put your feelings in words very well. -
WOW this is a very deep sad and emotional poem you have written here, sorry to hear that you had to go through life like this you had written this poem with so much emotion I can feel your pain good luck in the contest
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a good piece, just wondering why there are no comments here if it was psoted in 1999! i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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