The Uniform you wear,
Says you will protect and serve,
The Uniform you wear,
Gives me horrible flashbacks.
Flashbacks of that one night,
The night you took my freedom.
The very freedom,
I strive to get back everyday.
They teach us,
as we grow up...
To trust you,
You will help when I'm in trouble.
Instead of helping me,
That night you ripped and tore my clothes.
You laughed as I cryed and screamed,
for help.
Your co-workers watched,
As you took me away in your car.
Telling me your in for a ride,
And I don't know a thing.
You have a "Code of Blue",
Honor each other,
Never tell what they have done,
You may need them someday.
Yet, out on the streets,
You arrest citzens,those who rape,
Put them behind the bars...
Where you should be.
The Uniform you wear,
doesn't give me a sense of trust.
The Uniform you wear,
Scares me half to death.
You hurt me in ways,
Only a criminal would.
You should be behind prison bars,
Instead of watching the prisoners through them.
Protect and to serve, your motto...
Protect yourself,
and serve your own needs.
You don't deserve the honor of the Uniform you wear.
Author notes
This poem is about how I was almost rapped by two officers of the law. And how they changed my life forever, I will never be able to go back.
Written April 18th, 2003
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The only problem I have with this is that you say it tells why you can't trust, and that it's a "tail" (I'm assuming you mean "tale") of terror .. but there really isn't anything to it other then "you're in a position of authority and you abuse it and that's why I don't like you" it doesn't really say what he does that is so terrible?
Ok, and typos ..
"flash backs" I believe is "flashbacks" one word .. I'm not positive on that, though ..
"sence" would be "sense"
"thru" .. while that is a variant of the word you're looking for, perhaps you should use the original form, "through"?
"matto" would be "motto"
Now .. don't think that this isn't a good poem, it IS .. it's just not quite the epic tale you seem to have been going for .. it's more a simple poem saying "I'm afraid" rather then "this is why I'm afraid". Thank you for posting it, and I hope to see more work from you as you grow and evolve as a poet! ^_^ -
good job!
Hey, what's up???
How are you today???
Well, this is terribly sad and tragic....... No one should ever have to deal with pain like this, but, sadly, it does happen, all too often....... You did a great job of getting your emotions across........ I'm just sorry you have to write about such a trasgic thing........ Good job!
I really do look forward to reading more of yours, just as soon as I can!!! Please take care!!!!
Very Sincerely,
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~always what if~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
**crazycrazybeautiful**
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Very well written, it's rather chilling, made me gasp a slight breath when I saw where it was going. My imagination had this whole idea out of the title....I wasn't even close...very good an thanks for your comments, they are much appreciated!
-Angel aka WoundedAngel.
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good job... i like it it shows what most think of the police, nice represtntation..... i likez it i likez it alot... -
anger and sadness all welled up together.
thanks for sharing this, it is very well written. -
Okay..Well! This gives an eerie state to the high brow of militia.
What an EDGE on this. I was jarred, and that could be very effective to the reader.
"You should be behind prison bars,
Instead of watching the prisoners thru the bars."
I think this is waaaaayyyyyyy personal to critique right now, but those are the only lines I would replace one of the 'bars' so that you don't repeat it, you see?
Excellent angst/release. I'm so very sorry. I remember I went through this a looooooooong time ago. You are wise to write about it.
Good for you!. Warmly, CookieZeal -
good job
Well um I guess the story behind this poem is a long, sad and painful one but I can tell that it was terrible. I loved the poem and it shows alot of emotions that are strong as hell. Very powerful. I cant say much because I cant think of the words to describe this. All i can really say is that it was slightly disturbing and made me think of a kid I know who was abused as a kid and from that moment on he couldnt ever listen to a certain radio station because it reminded him of what his father listened to. Anyways, i liked this.
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