You're the Goddess of my dreams
And your piercing bite redeems.
Your blood tipped wings surround me,
Like a black feathered marquee,
And warm me like flowing blood
Till our pulses sync and thud
While our passions rage and flood.
Your tender hands on my skin
Make my soul revel in sin
And as my breath comes quicker
The lights begin to flicker.
As my spirit catches flame
And I quickly cast off shame
I beg you to stake your claim.
You throw me against the wall
And I am within your thrall
As you devour my lips
And cause my heart to eclipse.
My completion you pursue
But before you can subdue
I slip my fingers in you.
We move together in lust
And our fingers swiftly thrust;
As we both near our rapture
And we strive for it's capture,
You sink your teeth in my flesh
And drink while orgasms thresh
And our spirits ever mesh.
Author notes
The image is credited to lastTrip69 from deviantart.com
Written September 5th, 2006
In a list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 14 of 14
-
"You throw me against the wall
And I am within your thrall
As you devour my lips
And cause my heart to eclipse.
My completion you pursue
But before you can subdue
I slip my fingers in you." is my favorite part -
Sounds like the idea of a Succubi... Beautifully dark and erotic, filled with great graphical imagery and sense of lust. I wouldn't mind a Incubi for myself, which is strange as most people think i'm sweet and innocent... Yeah, only when i'm roleplaying
Good luck in the contest.
-
hmmm maybe i will cahnge th erule caz this is a beautiful write here i relly liked it, your words and imagrey were beautiful!!
*Shadow*
-
-
Thanks!
I'm glad you like it. You don't have to allow it into your contest or anything I just thought you would want to read it. Thank you for the applause and your kind words. Later. Lady Lilly
-
-
very good.
I really like it! It's very good!
-
Hawt
I love this right here ... this is extravagent ... Hot, Sensual ... I love vampires ... and I love the way you put lust and vampiric behaviors together ... that would be the type of write I would do ... absolutely outstanding ... wow this is going to be a tough choice ... you really made me feel it in this write ... keep writing ... i'll be checking more of your stuff out later ... till then ... ta ta for now but never forever ... and good luck in the contest
-
wow nive picture i luv it and the poem is awsome well done and good luck in the contest smiles 
-
Lilly nice blood sucking erotica poem I liked all of it but, one line that stood out most would be
But before you can subdue
I slip my fingers in you.
Ms. Lilly naughty gurl, im gonna tell your mother. Nice pic, it makes me want an apple (look at it upside-down). -
great dark write!!! i loved it!! it somehow had a dark sensuality in it and it flowed beautifully...
and the ending was just amazing!
i am, well u can say, in love with dark poetry, i love dark erotica, and, well, vampires are my one and only fantasy.. and ur poem has dark, it has erotica and it has a vampire goddess!!! well.. what more can i say.. u have brought my fantasy to life with this one!!! hehe
great job!
~rana~ -
I like it, but I don't love it. The way you described things was original, and I admire that. You did everything I ask, which is probably gonna earn you I spot on my favourites. Great job.
Next time, be a little less careful, and just make it wild.
EnticingWishesAndBloodiedKisses
-Allura -
You really must read my entry. It's almost like a reply to your poem! This is a really great write.
-
That's why my comments say that this is my version of the Alliterisen form. I put a couple twists on your basic form. ~Lilly~
-
Sorry, this is not an alliterisen. You have the seven syllables correct, but you forgot the one alliteration per line rule.
-
Now that's what I call a dark, erotic write! Just awesome! You are extreme talented, please keep on writing!
This write was a succes, I really hope you will win!
Blessed Be
Meet me when the grave unleashes me
Muahahaha
Adding your comment:
1 - 14 of 14
