the waitress slips
while serving my fish
catch of the day
Author notes
Written September 4th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Seventeen syllables by Hiatus.
1350 points, ended May 1, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Haiku's About Water 'n' stuff... Prewrites Welcome by PerVirtuous.
1300 points, ended August 18, 2007, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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cute
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PetVirtuous Allan
Thsnk you
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Good stuff... Close call.
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sheltered
Thank you for the comments and the applause. They are greatly appreciated.
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Joyful!
Dear Pollycheck,
Reading this was a pleasure - loved the catch!
Good Luck to you in the contest.
Tang
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intanglio2ring
Thank you so much for your comments. I am glad that you liked my haiku.
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Thank you so much for your kind words bengalibelle. They are truely appreciated.
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Thank you so much for your comments Rabe Lenore. They are appreciated.
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Hi Polly, a very worthy winner! I dare say i backed the right horse! Congratulations!
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Got My Vote
Congratulations on the Gold! You seem to have a natural flair for these tricky little ku's.
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Thanks ma belle and congrats on the bronze, not sure why they switched it from the silver.
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oops! They gave me the silver--then zapped it away and gave me the bronze. Boo This happened to me before in another contest. I won gold--they did a recall and slapped me with a silver. Good lord, I must have enemies!!! -B
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Rats-Darn, if you hadn't entered this I would have won the gold!!!! hahaha Seriously, I am very happy for you; this was a beauty! Congrats on the GOLD. ♥ Belle
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Thank you for your comments ma belle. I am glad that you enjoyed my haiku.
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This is beyond cute! LOL Really creative haiku with pun in tact. Looks like GOLD through and through. All my best,
Belle
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Thank you so much for your comments Gordon. Yes I did get it right on the first try. Just proves that even a blind hog finds an acorn once and a while.
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excellent
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click on this link to find a journal which is looking for haiku for its second issue. deadline for submissions is sept 25th.
du5tin.net/haiku/
send them up to ten of your best haiku. if you want me to take a look at the ones you decide to send out, i'll do that for you. send me a PM.
now that you have started to write good haiku, it's time for you to respect them a little more and try to share them with the world.
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click on this link to find a journal which is looking for haiku for its second issue. deadline for submissions is sept 25th.
send them up to ten of your best haiku. if you want me to take a look at the ones you decide to send out, i'll do that for you. send me a PM.
now that you have started to write good haiku, it's time for you to respect them a little more and try to share them with the world.
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Thank you so much for your comments myron. I have no idea how I would even start to contact a haiku journal.
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you're getting quite a few good haiku together. have you sent any of them out to a haiku journal for possible publication?
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Thank you so much for your comments myron. I quess your teaching is finally starting to sink in through my thick skull....
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perfect
the waitress slips
while serving my fish
catch of the day
lol, this is very funny and very clever. every line contains a vivid and clear image the last line is open-ended in the traditional haiku way. this gives the poem depth and makes me wonder if there is a hint of romance in this slap-stick moment as well.
i love this haiku/senryu. it seems perfect to me - i can't think of anything to improve it, now matter how hard i try.
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Thank you so much for your comments bengalibelle. Your words of encouragement are greatly appreciated.
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Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement mzblondemoments. They are greatly appreciated.
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Thank you so much for your comments Old Doc Wit. I am glad that you enjoyed my haiku.
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Thank you so much for your comments Tishu. They are truely appreciated.
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Very humorous.You are doing just great, polly-this one is even better than the one in the other contest.Best of luck.
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Seafood dish
Made me queasy
Day old fish
Polly this is very amusing, You have done a great job on this one. I love it! Good luck in the contest!!!
~much love~
carol
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Very clever Polly.....LOVED IT!
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Yes, nicely done Pollycheck - fishfingers I guess
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Thank you so much for your comments Busho. I am glad that you enjoyed my haiku.
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one is left wondering who caught the fish lollol
very good and very clever pollycheck
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my haiku speakingup4kids. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
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this is just too cute, I love it
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Thank you so much for the comments azure85. It was fun to write. I am already working on getting a second one together.
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Hi Pollycheck, and welcome to our haiku contest.
the waitress slips
while serving my fish
catch of the day
Oh, this is funny. I think it is delightful.
Good luck in the contest!
Susie
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