green life
tries
concrete's fortress
Author notes
Written September 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- jack kerouac style haiku by bridgetjanejone.
300 points, ended September 9, 2006, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I loved this! Haiku poetry is a very difficult art form to accomplish, I have been trying to learn more about it and improve. But you did a wonderful job on this. I'm imagining grass or a tree sprouting up through concrete, growing even though it's not supposed to be there. Nature always finds its way.
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i love haikus not cause there short but because they have to make sense and have all this stuff in so short of a poem....i love it and ya know u dont find alot of really good ones...i like it! great job hehe!
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Hm. This is a little vague, I'm not sure what you are saying and there's no real juxaposition. I THINK I know what it's about, but I'm not sure, can you work on it a bit?
green life
tries
concrete's fortress
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This was very good...best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari
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