warm moonlight
fondles
spilt whiskey
Author notes
Written September 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- jack kerouac style haiku by bridgetjanejone.
300 points, ended September 9, 2006, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A really lovely image here.Congrats on your well-deserved gold.
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Thank you so much. I didn't even know that I had won until you commented.
Love and Blessings, Ashlee -
Congratulations on your win in this contest. It is so very well deserved
Gaylene
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Now this could be good. There's a real, original moment in there which can be telling the reader so much about that moment: how the whiskey got spilt, is the drinker sad and loneley in the night. I'm not sure 'fondles' is the right word though!
Perhaps
amber moonlight
reflected
spilt whiskey
amber's pretty good because whiskey is amber so it's a nice link. I like it!
Edited on Sep 09, 3:22 p.m. because ''.
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