I wish I could write about flowers.
How they sparkle after summer showers.
How they paint the garden or the field.
How insects forage for the nectar they yield.
I wish I could write about beasts,
and not just as a source of feasts.
Animals of the wild as they leap and bound,
confidently guarding their own patch of ground.
I wish I could write about the sea.
Wild and tempestuous, stormy but free.
Source of humanity, provider of food.
Capricious or cruel according to mood.
I wish I could write about the weather,
with thunder and lightning going hell for leather.
Violent storms dealing an earth shattering blow
or gentle rain helping gardens to grow.
I wish I could write of the horrors of war
and all the mad reasons they are fought for.
To tell of the acts of the everyday heroes,
fighting for the folly of political zeroes.
I wish I could write of the pleasures of drink.
Of all the great wines red, white and pink.
The product of the malt and the barley, the grape and the grain,
or even a cupful of refreshing rain.
I wish I could write of the great power of song,
Of pop and grand opera or just a pub sing-along.
Psalms out of history with the power to inspire,
or the modern anthems of which folk never tire.
I wish I could write a poetic treasure
with rollicking rhythm and metric measure.
Vibrant verse to pass down through the ages.
Not just meaningless rhymes to fill up my pages.
Author notes
Written September 4th, 2006
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Your visits are always welcime Steve,
I too have been remiss about visiting old favourites recently having found myself getting caught up in the admin over at Oldpoetry. Fun but time consuming.
I hope to get away for some walks soon and hope for inspiration for something more poetic (and to shed a few pounds
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Thanks for your comments as always and also for the generous applause.
Jim -
Another fine piece my friend, I've enjoyed catching up on some of your work. Never disappointing. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Thanks for your kind comment
Jim -
You have just written about them. Wonderful writing here. Very imagery. Your words are really really good.
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Your last words are the finest praise I could recieve. It is rightly said that imitation is the best form of flattery.
Thank you for your kind comment.
Jim -
This was really good poetry, perhaps not epic in scale or piercingly poignant, but memorable nonetheless for its wit and cleverness, in that you write about each of the things even as you seem to imply that you can't write about them. I wish i had written this!
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Nounou I thank you for your applause and comment but I resent you using my poetry comments to advertise your own work.
That is crass and boorish behaviour.
Jim -
i would be very pleased if you coud read 'silent voices' or 'the street of pain(1]' or 'broken wings' or 'i lost my muse' they are my favorite, but compared to an ex- teacher they are baaad.. i suppose
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hey u are so talented my boss!! so nice.. i wish this too, but i guess u are talented enough to be able to write -
Aw shucks
thanks Ros.
Jim -
I think you wrote about those things really well as always.Good on Yer!All the best, Ros
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From your mouth to God's ears.
Thanks for the very flattering comment quakietree.
Jim -
Thanks for writing Gordon. I have difficulty with free verse and should really try to get to grips with it. It is a valid form when properly used.
However I do feel that the majority of writers use it as a soft option and produce chopped up prose instead. Oops I'd better get off my soap box before someone gives it a kick.
Good luck with your own writing.
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I'm getting quite big-headed after that nice comment M-in-M.
I must admit I do like this one but still think I am not a poet (see allpoetry.com/Poem/1303492 )
Anyway thanks for reading and writing it is much appreciated.
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Hello Liz,
Thanks for your comment and suggestion. I had all those thes in mind but discarded it as unwieldy. I've put them back in for a while and will try it like that at the next few recitations and see if it fits. The length does give more emphasis to the last line of that verse which fits with my drinking habits
Jim -
Hi nice niece. Thanks for your comments.
Sharing my time between the Oldpoetry site, singing, and housework I haven't managed much lately but this was an idea resurected from the past and reworked recently. I'm glad you liked it.
Jim -
wish I could write a poetic treasure
with rollicking rhythm and metric measure.
You have!
Who knows, maybe a hundred years from now people will be reading your lines. We can hope, anyway.qt
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excellent
Like you, I-Like-Rhymes, I like rhymes.
I've never gotten the hang of free verse. Maybe I will some day.
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I really loved this! One of my favorites of your's...and you know,all the things you wished to write about that you mentioned in this poem? You described quite eloquently. Regardless of the form you use,I happen to believe one can write it just as well. You are excellent at rhymes. Not all of us can say that(me included). I hope you are proud of your work. I know I am. Keep it up!
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Hey I really like this, and of course you have given the lie to the fact that you can't write about any of these things. AND there is only one place where the metre fails, the malt and barley line, if you put, 'the malt and the barley, the grape and the grain, it would scan.
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hi dear uncle
Welcome back on writing again.
It's ok, don't worry. Your poem was as lovely as your other poems.
Wish you the best.
Shahrzad
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Hi Ann,
There's nothing wrong with rhyme of course but even I know there are other things. Anyway thanks for taking the time to read and write. Also for your own verse.
Jim
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This is so fine, and
What's wrong with rhyme?
It too, takes skill
When you've hours to kill
You are doing ok
That's all I can say!
I like your poem and rhyme rules - ok?
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Thanks for reading and writing Von.
This one has been in my scran-bag for a while and I filled it out sat in a dockside cafe yesterday. I managed to perform it at my poetry group meeting last night which was a pleasant experience.
TTFN
Jim -
I have the same wish as your final 2 lines Jim but for the time being I'll keep on enjoying myself reading poetry like this to give me inspiration.
Von
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